Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
Every young adult will grow and live apart from their parents to form their own families. The ages for those young adults to be independent depends on each person. some people may have to live longer with their parents and some others may not. This essay will discuss the issue of independent life and living with their families for a longer time.
Most young adults prefer to have a seperate or independent life form from their parents as soon as possible. This is because they have a strong urge for freedom in doing what they desire.but in fact many of them fail. This should not be surprising since often they are actually not ready mentally although they are physically ready. It is widely understood that to live independently requires a lot of energy and is not easy at all. In this twenty first century, people may need more and more preparation because competition is increasing rapidly. An observation shows that many university graduates are unemployed. Therefore, they will not be able to support and fulfill their necessities.
So living independently at an early age is not suitable fo all young adults, some young adults may need o take more time to prepare themselves befoe going out to struggle. They need to be ready to support themselves. Taking time to get more education and living with their families for a longer time may lead them to a better independent life because they will be well prepared for hard-life outside.
The time to live independently depends on the person himself. He or she must decide whether they are ready or not to leave their parents to have an independent life. The decision will vary from person to person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
... be independent depends on each person. some people may have to live longer with the...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: twenty-first
... energy and is not easy at all. In this twenty first century, people may need more and more ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, well, apart from, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1378.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 286.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81818181818 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56501361225 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 212.727598566 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506993006993 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7491261106 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.0588235294 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8235294118 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17647058824 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386700513222 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130388454156 0.076458572812 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115770683701 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262628371487 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137315653122 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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