Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Young adults should seek to gain independence from their parents as soon as possible. From behavioural studies, it has been shown that individuals who break free from the protective care of their parents at the appropriate age of a young adult tend to achieve more in life. This is not to say that other young adults who generally prefer to stay with their parents as they approach adulthood do not amount to much, yet their counterpart who gain independence early tend to out-perform them.
Considering the natural ecosystem and behaviour, eagle, for instance, devote only stipulated amount of time with their young ones. While the eagle is not negligent as a parent, it innately understands the importance of letting the young ones go as soon as they near maturity, as survival - the key to mastering the jungle - is a skill best learnt through early independence from parental care. The eaglets that take initiative and break free from their parents nests thrive better in the wilds.
Asides the wild, let us look closely at the humans of the present generation. Young adults who stay longer with their parents have a harder time developing good social skills. A 17 years old male who mainly stays in his parents basements playing video games would have a harder time building relationships that could lead to lasting friendship or marriage.
A curious case is that of medical student who due to the structure and duration of their learning have to rely on their parents through their early adulthood. Even then, it is not uncoming to find among these medical students married couples supporting themselves with part-time jobs. And these independent ones usually come out on top of their peeers in their studies as well.
Ultimately, to grow a generation of capable young adults, it is of utmost importance that they learn to break free of parental-care early.
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Suggestion: who is a due
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, then, well, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98076923077 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6626489403 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570512820513 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1036699364 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.538461538 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369236011089 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143089365964 0.076458572812 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869675399178 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192046857413 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888609576601 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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