The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

To be a good leader, one must be a good follower. Some believe that the unity that comes from a common sense of cooperation leads to a greater collective achievement than the individuals combined. Others think that to make an outstanding leader, young people must imbibe a strong sense of competition to out-perform and lead their peers. However, from nature and studies, it is clear that young people who have better cooperation skills tend to be the ones others follow.

It is obviously undeniable that youths are btter prepare for leadership when they are instilled with a good sense of cooperation. In the business world, employees come together to achieve or contribute to a common goal. How then can any group of people achieve anything if they are constanly seeking to out-play their collegueas? Take a couple of attorneys assigned to a case with one of them sharing as little information as possible with her mate all so she can edge them out. They will definitely be unable to carry out their duties to represent their client who was unfortunate to be assigned to them. It would be a surprise to find other employees in her firm willing to follow her example.

More significantly, while promoting competition will result in survival of the fittest; however that is just it, they are only surviving. On the other hand, cooperation will cause a group to thrive instead. It is scientifically proven that animals in the wild who work well together have higher survival rates that those who do not.

In conclusion, it is evident that teaching young people to build a sense of cooperation and not competition leads to development of capable leaders in the society. While being competitive can set one apart from the crowd, it does not guarantee that others will be willing to follow. If anything, those who are unremarkable but blend well with everyone are the best kind of leader in any area, be it in government or industry.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, then, well, while, apart from, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 331.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8580060423 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7791212198 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543806646526 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1868529951 60.3974514979 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.5 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3125 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148068247619 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515661810145 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459125505604 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0905762865893 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238825628015 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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