Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
The prompy provides two situations one in which the young adult wants independence from their parents as soon as possible and the second where they prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Although both of these are subjective and may depend from person to person, for me, I would choose the latter situation of staying with families for longer time. The reasons for this are stated below.
To begin with, the young adults that live with their families for a long time might be more career oriented as compared to their counterparts. This is because, there would be a constant check and pressure from the families to excel in exams, get a degree and have a sustainable job. Not only this, the person who lives with his or her families might know about their financial situation and might want to mitigate it (in case the financial income is not that great). This becomes one more reason for an individual to be career oriented. However, I am not saying that all the young adults who are independent are not career oriented. Exceptions can occur from both sides. A person living with family might not be career oriented whereas a person with complete independence might be career oriented. All I am implying is that there might be more chance of a young adult to be career oriented when he or she is living with his or her family.
Secondly, the person living with his or her family really bonds close to his or her families compared to the one that lives away or has the desired independence. I can relate this because my cousin who lives in other part of the country is not that attached to the family as compared to his brother. This can be seen because he does not like to enjoy family dinner or is constantly engaged with his or her friends over phone while his brother loves to spend time with family. Furthermore, the family values might be learnt more by the one who lives with his or her family. This might make a huge impact and affect or change the overall personality of the person.
Finally, the person living with his or her family can get immediate help from other members of the family in the times of crisis. There can be various types of crisis viz financial crisis, health crisis, relationship crisis etc. Suppose for instance that the an individual had with an accident. He or she could be in an hospital after that and if he or she lives with family then they could reach out to him immediately and take care of him or her. In contrast, it might take hours if not days to reach out to an adult who has independence from their parents and lives far away.
To conclude, living with families can affect a person's life to a huge extent. Furthermore, having independece might push an individual away from the family making this relationship a formal one while it shouldn't be the case. Hence, I think that young adults should prefer to live with their families for a longer time instead of desiring independence from their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'an' is left.
Suggestion: the; an
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, while, for instance, i think, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2438.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 531.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59133709981 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40321537148 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.403013182674 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 774.0 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.023713584 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.583333333 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334829445045 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123258203232 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129649957154 0.0737576698707 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251168838175 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127696628054 0.0645574589148 198% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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