The director of the International Health Foundation recently released this announcement:
“A new medical test that allows the early detection of a particular disease will prevent the deaths of people all over the world who would otherwise die from the disease. The test has been extremely effective in allowing doctors to diagnose the disease six months to a year before it would have been spotted by conventional means. As soon as we can institute this test as routine procedure in hospitals around the world, the death rate from this disease will plummet.”
The argument that the new medical test will prevent the deaths of people all over the world is not entirely logically convincing, since it ignores certain crucial assumptions.
First, the argument assumes that the added six months to one year to the treatment period of the disease makes it curable. However, this assumption does not hold if the disease has no cure, it would serve only to increase the anxiety of the infected who will have to spend extra six months worrying about their impending demise. In this case, it would have been better if the test was not instituted.
Second, the argument never addresses the feasibility of integrating the new medical test globally. Seeing the test is still new and often times solutions that are just created may be quite expensive to replicate, how does the director plan to overcome this challenge and successfully institute the test all over the world? Even if the test is made available all across the world, it would be presumptuous to think that everyone can afford it.
Again, no proof was provided to show the reliability of the test in the long-term. Although, the argument states that the test has helped doctors diagnose the disease earlier when compared to conventional means yet it fails to give adequate premise to show that the test has passed every required medical approval and is ready for public use. Despite some extremely successful trials of the test, it would be unwarranted to assume that people everywhere would eagerly embrace it.
Finally, should the test be accessible to all and sundry, we do not know if the expertise to administer it is ubiquitous as well. The argument fails to justify that doctors and other medical practitioners all over the world possess the technical know-how to read the tests appropriately.
Thus, the argument is not completely sound. The evidence in support of the conclusion that the new medical test's six month to one year early detection of a disease will prevent deaths of people all over the world is insufficient. Ultimately, the argument might have been strengthened by providing more information in support of it curability, ease of replication, affordability, and reliability.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 363 350
No. of Characters: 1789 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.365 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.928 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.683 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.621 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.379 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.379 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 117, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...nclusion that the new medical tests six month to one year early detection of a diseas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, then, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 363.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04407713499 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77131152453 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526170798898 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3420148466 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.066666667 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323464733518 0.218282227539 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108481410272 0.0743258471296 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954507218134 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177757059939 0.128457276422 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613950188083 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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