Claim: Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's major field of study.
Reason: Acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
There could be many factors affecting someone to be perceived as being truly educated and being well acknowledged in various fields of study is merely one of them. Someone who is sophisticated and has good taste in manners, who is erudite in a certain academic discipline, or who dedicates their life in helping those who needs others to live a qualified life, each of all these factors can make someone who is truly educated. Which is why universities should not be forcing students to take a multiple courses outside of their interest.
Going to a university is a first step for students to actually live as an adult and make their own choices. Students should be able to take the courses that are related to what they wish to pursue. Taking various courses might help them broaden their perspectives but doesn't always lead to understanding all the deep concepts of each field. It could just put the students in an awkward position where they can't choose either field because the depth of knowledge in each and all areas of study they have learned is light. Letting the students to take the courses they have interest in would enable them to become an expert in the field they wish to pursue which could have them perceived as someone who is truly educated.
Furthermore, university is not a place to make students only focus on studying various knowledges. The purpose of the universities should be to help students search what truly interests them and challenge their limits. Students who are interested in volunteering to help the poor or lending their talents to teach kids, those who have the desire to help people live a more quality life with the development of computers, and those who tries to become a CEO and hire thousands of people, all of these students have the passion and ability to become the best in their fields. Having the passion and the desire to pursue their interest by educating themselves in the university should be ones who should be perceived as truly educated.
To sum up, having deep knowledge in multiple fields in academic is not the only factor that makes someone be truly educated. Also, the universities should not be forcing students to take such various courses for such reason because multiple factors could be the reason why one could be perceived as truly educated.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, well, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 398.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81155778894 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55025620714 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424623115578 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 604.8 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.729250443 60.3974514979 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.785714286 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4285714286 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259155358753 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121839543192 0.0831039109588 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531976067252 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181120427427 0.150359130593 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232103318995 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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