College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The claim stated in an absolute term that the choice of study field for college student is supposed to be dependent on whether a future job is available or not. The author overstated the job orientation purposes in higher education while ignored the essence of education. I don’t agree with it in general, but I concede that it applies to some people in reality.
First of all, the most important issue should be addressed in discussing this issue is the goal of higher education. In my view, it is supposed to be agreed that the original purpose of education is to get people educated, which means teaching people how to think and how to become a better human being. Apparently to get a decent paid job in nowadays seems incompatible to the traditional values where the whole education system was originally designed for. However, it should always be valued to regard college education as true education instead of a fast way to get high-paid jobs. Because we are humans rather than machines whose only mission is to work, instead we think, live and cultivate human civilization.
However, just because we want to get educated doesn’t mean we should ignore the financial situation our college choice could possibly lead us into. Career do matter. Thus, it should be admitted that the future job availability is one of the issues should be carefully considered. In the real world, there are numerous broke artists ending up homeless at the corner of the street. Even though we eventually know Vincent Van Gough, plenty of “Vincent” are buried in history, with unknown names and tragic life stories. Perhaps, to avoid the worst scenario of life, college students have to make choice with consideration of future job.
But job availability, or the money which could be potentially earned should not be the priority whatsoever. The priority should always be one’s interest. Nevertheless, the worst scenario mentioned above could only happen with relatively low probability in real world. Thus, it is definitely not wise to give up dreams for a safe future when one could get both. From this perspective, I think the claim only hold reasonable under extremal cases as discussed above.
To summarize, I generally disagree with the view presented as in think the purpose of education is definitely not to get a well-paid job. But, there are exceptional cases the point view do seem reasonable for a certain extent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...ng. Apparently to get a decent paid job in nowadays seems incompatible to the traditional v...
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Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
... financial situation our college choice could possibly lead us into. Career do matter. Thus, i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, thus, well, while, i think, in general, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 405.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04444444444 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82755401865 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3555757918 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2857142857 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180639356088 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525494441672 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461671560639 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109670040488 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371897166783 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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