"Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education."Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you

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"Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education."

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Education has always been one of the major concerns in any society. Different governments have tried a variety of criteria throughout the history in order to assess students in different grades. According to this prompt, they should stop experiencing and put the most emphasis on students’ scores. While students may sometimes benefit from the competition for obtaining higher grades, I mostly agree with this statement, for in my perspective, the overall cons of this phenomenon outweigh its pros.

First of all, competition is not always a negative aspect of an education system. Take Harvard University as an example. If the competition in this school was not so high, the courses would have been less demanding, the instructors less exacting, and the students less hard-working. Accordingly, its graduates could not have been as successful as they are with current conditions. This example clearly shows that competition for getting higher grades might cause students to try harder and study more to get the best possible results. Consequently, they will become more erudite in their fields, and more successful in their upcoming careers.

Nevertheless, this kind of competition may result in a considerable amount of stress in students. This might not be a critical problem for college students but will probably cause serious issues in younger ones. Research has shown that the more stress primary schools put on their students, the more long-lasting problems they will experience in the future. Consider a youth who likes to become an artist. If the school is so demanding in other courses such as mathematics or physics, he or she has to spend most of his or her time in order to get high grades in such courses. In addition, they might not be interested or talented in mathematics or physics; thus, they will not be able to achieve high grades in such courses, and they will probably feel rejected and go though even more stress. Such students may even give up studying art at all and choose a different course of action for their future. As a result, schools should provide a calm and enjoyable environment where every student can flourish, and this will not be pragmatic unless they reduce the competition for obtaining higher grades.

Additionally, competition will result in corruption and reducing the level of knowledge among students. This means that if getting good grades in the school is too important, students will be motivated to cheat on some exams in order to get higher marks. Not only that, but also some teachers might try to manipulate the exam results in order to earn money. Even if one ignores this possibility, it is indisputable that most of the students will only try to memorize the test-taking strategies and practice questions to get a good grade by any means. For example, if the only way for students to go to their dream colleges is by getting exceptional results in the high school, It is perfectly plausible to assume the mentioned situations will happen. Furthermore, It is of crucial significance for the students to gain a deep understanding of the basic materials in high school instead of just memorizing some specific problem-solving techniques, for they will not succeed neither in the college nor in any job without profound backgrounds.

In conclusion, education is such a complex regime that it is almost impossible to assert anything about it with absolute certainty. However, despite the usefulness of competition in some occasions, I believe its drawbacks such as causing more stress, possibility of different kinds of corruption, and training less educated students are far more noticeable.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, while, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3075.0 2235.4752809 138% => OK
No of words: 597.0 442.535393258 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15075376884 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91840561253 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492462311558 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 934.2 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3733139969 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.269230769 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9615384615 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 5.21951772744 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105945133768 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0329540890028 0.0831039109588 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328228441818 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.064239319998 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203736078964 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 154.0 100.480337079 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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