Prompt: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Children should have more free time rather than spending their time on doing homework or attending organized activities.
Children have been a major concern for parents and governments throughout history. There have been different opinions about whether they must participate in school related activities or they are better if we give them more freedom. The statement assumes that the latter is more advantageous. However, I strongly disagree with the prompt because of the two main reasons that I will delve into in this essay.
First of all, by spending a considerable amount of time on doing homework, children will be able to gain a profound understanding of their courses; accordingly, they will achieve more success in their future careers. For instance, take an eight-year-old boy as an example. By devoting regular hours each day to his courses, he will master a huge number of skills such as mathematics, science, and art. By doing so, he will have a much easier time finding a suitable job in the future given his various skills. On the other hand, if he wastes his time when he is young, he has to try much harder in the future to learn such basic materials, which in turn will adversely affect his opportunities. It is of vital importance for children to spend their time wisely because they are immature and cannot observe the long-picture. Hence, they should not take activities such as doing homework for granted to build a better future for themselves.
Secondly, Children will make a number of new friends if they participate in organized activities and sports. In addition, they will have a healthier life if they take part in different sports. For instance, Manny children have a strong desire for video games. If they play such games for a significant amount of time, they will run into some medical issues such as overweight later on. Not only that, but also they will not have many opportunities to meet new people. Without good friends, they will not learn social skills and become isolated, and without a healthy life, they will experience many issues. Thus, it is not a good idea to allow children to do whatever they want with their time.
In conclusion, Issues related to the children have to be treated with great care and wisdom, because they are usually extremely nuance and depend on so many factors. To that end, I am convinced that children should involve in organized activities more because of building a better future and having a healthier life with good friends.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89655172414 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66205456272 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522167487685 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1160302023 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227616033004 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800376492146 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665748696706 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144878870466 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302354692157 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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