Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing
fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree
with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the
most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your
position.
The speaker thinks that educational institutions should take responsibility to dissuade students from fields of study which are not good for career developing. Though the statement is agreeable to some extent, there are some considerations which should be kept in mind while taking such big decisions.
Students build their career on the basis of which field they have studied in their student life. So choosing field of study, students should keep in mind the factors like job facilities, salary, social status etc. Say for example, a boy studying in Computer Science certainly has a better career prospect than who is studying in Arts, considering than salary, job facilities etc. So often teachers would insist them to prefer Computer Science than Arts, as being a Computer Engineer a student is more likely to be succeed in his career than a student who would study Arts.
However, the means of a bright career should not be the only factors which students should keep in mind. Another inevitable factor for choosing career path is the passion. Students should ask themselves too what they want, what they are good at. Like, if any one is good at photography, he should do it! If anyone loves the job of guiding travellers and tourists, he should definitely go for it! There are so many examples who are going to unorthodox career paths, building their own career and creating a new profession. Even there are many examples of switching careers to a completely different genre after discovering in which a man is good at. Such as, English Footballer Rio Ferdinand studied in the field of engineering before he realised he actually likes to play football and he is good at it. After switching his career, he has become a famous football player worldwide. There are so many examples like this. So educational institutions should inspire students to choose their career path not only considering job facilities and salary, but also their interest and passion.
In sum, the statement that student should be derived to the field of study which are good for career building is not completely favourable. The unorthodox careers and fields of study should also be encouraged to be followed if they are passionate about it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to career'
Suggestion: to career
... Another inevitable factor for choosing career path is the passion. Students should as...
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Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...y want, what they are good at. Like, if any one is good at photography, he should do it...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 371.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99460916442 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67852116449 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471698113208 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1554854931 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82352941176 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16567753615 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699070637285 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774056126523 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135741124945 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665273966367 0.0667264976115 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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