Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and suppo

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Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The argument mentions that academies should encourage students to have majors which can make them rich. It is definitely a good idea for every student to think about their future income; however, passion is the most important thing in everybody's job.
First of all, satisfaction is the most significant thing to pay attention to and not the money when it comes about major decision. Thus, students need to think and see what kind of job they want in the future. Imagine a student who encouraged by counselors and family members to choose medical field, but he/she actually loves to be a social worker. If that student decides to be a doctor, he/she might end of being bored to study and even drop out of school because interest can make a big difference to continue our path or not especially when things get overwhelmed.
Additionally, being successful might be a different definition for everyone. Consider someone who wants to enjoy her/his job whereas someone who just want to make a lot of money. People cannot be successful in their jobs when they do not care about their job responsibilities. When people do not like their job, it can bring frustration at work. They even might not have good attitudes with their co-workers. So, they might not be willing to continue their job when something even small goes wrong.
However, some people might believe that money is everything in job which cannot be true all the times. It can be true sometimes, but if people have passion about their career, they can earn more money eventually. For example, a waiter can work from bottom line and get more experience with promotion to become a restaurant manager someday. It might take longer than someone who already has a managing degree, but later or sooner a waiter will get what he wants.
It might be a dream for everyone to have a lucrative career; however, money cannot bring happiness because other factors like interest matter too.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...other factors like interest matter too.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, so, thus, whereas, for example, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 332.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84036144578 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56543590599 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545180722892 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8145074458 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5294117647 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5294117647 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127589835246 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477530943862 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380339681428 0.0758088955206 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.084067396004 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379592178132 0.0667264976115 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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