Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and suppo

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Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/ or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Mercenary factor is one of reasons for students to select their careers, but it is not the most important one. For individuals, it is understandable to set making money as the top priority, but in the long run, spiritual needs are more vital and meaningful to them, let alone educational institutions, which are invented to educate students to chase priceless dreams instead of temporal pursuits.

Admittedly, earning money is a very reality problem for students especially for those from poverished family, who are eager to be paid rich to pay back for their school debt. Even some students regard making money as their first purpose of their lives, which is not a fault, because it is baleful to judge one's choice as long as that is within the range of law. So in context like that, schools may guide them or inform them how to reach their goals or which way they should go to maximize their possibility to success. In other words, institutions are helping certain students based on particular cases.

However, it is wrong for educational institutions to trumpet lucrative careers as all students' priority. As educational institution, their biggest job is to educate students not only with knowledge, but the meaning of life, except certain cases mentioned before, the school should be normative, should encourage students to explore, to try, to find what is theire true enthusiasm.

If schools are actively encouraging students to select lucrative careers, most of them may have chosen finance fileds to start with, causing a large vacuous gap in other pay-less fields while hurting the balance in finance field as well. More graduates influx in that area, engendering larger pressure of peer and difficulty of getting a same job compared to previous years, which is called, "involved". Such fact can be viewed from China's market, in recent years, nearly ten-million new graduates involved into China's employment market, such situation not only increases the difficulty of finding a job, but also brings a problem is that, fewer and fewer blue-tie jobs are intriguing for those students. That may stem from China's educational system, overduely focusing on pragmatism, ignoring the importance of meaningful guidence in high school.
Furthermore, what those institutions should do is that, encourage students to deliberate what they want in the future, and by the same time provide them data regarding the real world.

To sum up, lucrative careers are enchanting for everyone, but as an institution, the horizon should not be limited by monetary factor, instead, should fixate on the effects of education on the whole society. Even schools should not actively encourage them to select high-salary jobs, they still should let student konw the benefits and downsides of a certain career, that is called the real guildence making students to deliberate.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...a fault, because it is baleful to judge ones choice as long as that is within the ra...
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Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ons to trumpet lucrative careers as all students priority. As educational institution, t...
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Line 7, column 104, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to finance'
Suggestion: to finance
...e careers, most of them may have chosen finance fileds to start with, causing a large v...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, still, thus, well, while, even so, in other words, on the whole, to start with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2415.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 462.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22727272727 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8350624232 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54329004329 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 743.4 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.7200823045 60.3974514979 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.0 118.986275619 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8 23.4991977007 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2 5.21951772744 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287157400243 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101123859778 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504898438905 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156859998694 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488220551861 0.0667264976115 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.1392134831 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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