Educators should find out what students want included in the curriculum and then offer it to them.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take.

Education system is one the key element that decides the fate of students and even the growth and development of a nation. The education policies and reforms should be adopted very cautiously, considering the suggestions of the students. The argument asserts that educators should consider the students opinions while deciding the curriculum for them. The argument is fallacious and inconclusive since implementing this policy could be obnoxious at certain situation. In my opinion this policy should be rather situation specific than generalized.

At first, yes, it is true that in any field it is vital to have feed back from the users or populace to improve the existing system. But in the education system there are several other elements that should be taken in consideration along with the student’s opinion. Consider for example, the scenario when students suggest to include a specific subject based on the current job opportunities. The novice students are not aware of the market trends and are lured to high paying jobs. The markets are susceptible to demand and supply. What if the trends change by the time the student graduates? Wouldn’t they blame the system and education system for not counseling them? Of course, they will and they might even loose faith in the education or government.

In addition to that, adolescents are usually undecided as in which subject to pursue their carrier. At this vital juncture they are no position to suggest anything to educators. In fact, it is the teachers who educate them about the options available by narrowing down their search. For instance, a sagacious student who has scored well in all the subjects might be confused in terms of furthering his education in science. Although he is unaware of strengths and weaknesses but his tutor is well aware of his strengths and will guide him to the correct path.

On the contrary to that, several studies have concluded that success rate increases exponentially if a student is let choose his field on interest. But this approach has subtle elements such as differentiating between interest and scope of facilities. For instance, a student, who want to further his education in artificial intelligence. There are many countries which are battering to fulfill the basic needs of the populace and thus, cannot afford to have required research facilities for artificial intelligence. In this case the teachers would have to guide the students with the other available options or convince them to apply to a foreign university where optimum research facilities are available.

In conclusion, the decision, whether or not to, include the suggestions of students should be situation specific. This approach would be in the interest of both educators and students.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...while deciding the curriculum for them. The argument is fallacious and inconclusive...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggest including'.
Suggestion: suggest including
...for example, the scenario when students suggest to include a specific subject based on the current...
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...lable. In conclusion, the decision, whether or not to, include the suggestions of students...
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...nterest of both educators and students.

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, of course, such as, in my opinion, it is true, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2338.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 447.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23042505593 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88281054178 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507829977629 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 729.9 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.5042922623 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.52 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.88 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166280162486 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488386547917 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398193567849 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0936895570913 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0145763073768 0.0667264976115 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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