The author of the prompt argues that educators should offer those subjects that students are willing to study. This is a naive proposition as it fails to realize that students are prone to choosing easy subjects and are simply not aware of what constitutes a balanced education. Indeed, in this essay, I shall argue that teachers should primarily design curriculums and only rarely take advice from students on what to include in it.
It is important to note that students are always looking for the easy way out when it comes to their academics. This is partly due to the increasing workload and the banal manner in which study materials are taught. Indeed, it is very common to find students studying only for the sake of making a living, rather than learning- which is the ultimate goal of education. When this factor is taken into account, that students rarely are enthusiastic about their studies nowadays, it is clear that entrusting curriculums to students is not the way forward in providing them a balanced education: students will simply choose easy topics, and perhaps irrelevant materials, that will allow them to go through their academic days smoothly, but without substantive education.
Even if we were to assume that students are likely to choose a balanced education, it is very likely that they are simply inexperienced when it comes to knowing what is the right from of education. That is to say that they are simply not well-versed in different academic subjects to design a proper curriculum. In an age of increasing distractions- video games, movies, etc- the last thing that a student is likely to be acquainted with is academics. As a result, it is very important that curriculums are primarily designed by teachers who are more experienced in the field of education; their decisions in this matter should not be drastically influenced by the decisions of students.
It is nevertheless true- despite their inexperience and unwillingness in academic matters- that students are more informed of their strengths and weaknesses than are teachers. The latter spends hours with so many students, as a result of which he or she is unable to personally know any one student well enough to determine the latter’s strengths and weaknesses. In this case, then, we can say that that students will be able to make more informed decisions regarding their curriculum: they can better design it in a way such that their weaknesses can be addressed.
Overall, however, it is clear that teachers should primarily design curriculums, rarely taking advice from students in deciding what should and should not be offered; only then can a balanced education be offered to students.
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...ses. In this case, then, we can say that that students will be able to make more ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, nevertheless, regarding, so, then, thus, well, as a result, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.5258426966 189% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.3162921348 230% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 445.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07640449438 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8281985846 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465168539326 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.9 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.386148672 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.6 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6666666667 23.4991977007 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53333333333 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171718397467 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659181778181 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378444643625 0.0758088955206 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109145371198 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036657886447 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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