The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Building new dormitories for the students is a good initiative fo the students enrolling in Buckingham college. But the evidence needed to justify allocating a significant amount of money for the construction of the dormitories is not completely justifiable.
Firstly, the claim that Buckingham's enrollement will double over the next 50 years based on current trends is too vague a prediction. The next 50 years can expect various changes to the society such as new, more efficient colleges or the resignation of the best faculty currently teaching at Buckhingham. Predicting such a positive outcome based on current trends is not reliable and does not guarentee that the new dormitories will be filled by students. It is also possible that the next 10 years can see a decrease in student enrollment due to new colleges being built in the country.
Secondly, although it is true that an increase in rent in the town can make it difficult for the students to find a suitable house, no information regarding the dormitory fee for the students and whether it is comparable to the rent for the apartments is given. It is also true that an investment in building new dormitories can increase the fee for staying in such facilties. Students can then opt to take apartments out of town for a lesser rent and use faster modes of commute to reach the college.
More information regarding the facilties present in the dormitories and the apartments needs to be considered. If the apartments have better security or recreational facilties then students would opt to take apartments for a slightly higher price. Expecting rent rates to increase in the following years based on current trends is also unwarranted. Real estate rates are known to fluctuate and moreover the college has no control over the rates of rents in the apartments in their town. The capacity of the dormitory rooms are also not provided. The college can opt to build rooms that can be shared by more than two people to accomodate more people should there be an increase in enrollment in the next couple of years.
Thirdly, claiming that the enrollement in Buckingham college is solely based on attractive dormitories is not a valid argument. Students enroll or decide on their colleges based on faculty, placement statistics, extra curricular activities, whether the college boasts of state-of-the-art technology among other reasons. Prospective students would definitely consider new, clean dormitories as a plus point while enrolling but that as a criteria for their future is definitely not a valid point.
New dormitories are definitely needed if Buckingham college expects more students in the future but more valid information needs to be collected before making such decisions that invlolve a lot of money. Few dormitories can be constructed if the college expects to have a higher rate of enrollment in the coming years. It would be wise for the college to consider the rate of increase in enrollment and the rent rates for the next couple of years before deciding to build.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 435, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a criterion' or simply 'criteria'?
Suggestion: a criterion; criteria
... plus point while enrolling but that as a criteria for their future is definitely not a va...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2556.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 504.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07142857143 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93298533891 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416666666667 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 797.4 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6577133238 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.714285714 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80952380952 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193647044615 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730220825482 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590061459756 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124275734492 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471995527354 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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