The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The idea of provision of extra dormitories by Buckingham college might prove to be advantageous to students in certain ways but not always. The argument made by the director of student housing at Buckingham College though somewhat persuasive, cannot be taken to be of absolute certainty because it is based on several flaws and unsubstantiated assumptions which render its line of reasoning weak and unconvincing.
To begin, the assumption made by the director that the rate at which students are enrolling in the Buckingham college would remain constant even after 50 years could be considered debatable. What if this rate becomes low in the upcoming years? In such a scenario, the newly built dormitories could remain vacant and the college may have to suffer huge financial losses. There is also a possibility of the number of dormitories experiencing an overflow due to excessive number of students in the college in the future. Lack of data that could be used to predict the exact number for dorm rooms has not been provided which renders making a qualitative decision prone to a lot of errors.
Moreover, while mentioning the possibility of increase in the house loans and rents in the city in the upcoming years, the director fails to consider the possibility of increase in opulence of people living in the city. People may have enough wealth to support their children and provide them with a suitable house without undergoing any serious monetary losses. Also, what if the average rent of the apartments in the city falls as the years pass by. No evidence has been provided to support the argument that rent will always increase in the upcoming years. In order to ameliorate this problem, data could be made available to make an accurate prediction of the future rents of apartments in the city.
Furthermore, the assumption that augmentation of new aesthetic dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enrol at Buckingham College could be considered as an extremely shallow presumption. What if Buckingham college does not have enough resources to provide actual, valuable education to its students? This could discourage students from enrolling at Buckingham and force them to look for other alternatives. The primary features that a student looks for in a college may be quality of education, faculty employed in the college, overall ranking of the college in the city etcetera. Therefore, merely new dormitories might not be enough to make students to enrol at Buckingham.
Therefore, it can be concluded that establishing new dormitories without consideration of some of these important factors could lead to negative results for the college as their reasoning rests on unstable grounds. Eradication of these equivocal scenarios could be achieved to a great extent by providing more quantitative information in certain aspects like house rents, number of current enrolments, rate of increase in student enrolments etcetera.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2491.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 475.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24421052632 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93542693691 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484210526316 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 800.1 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7568424928 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.105263158 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232906723568 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806877682864 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666255406184 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140367943947 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754557514313 0.0667264976115 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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