The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants.
"Butter has now been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. Only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers cannot distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine. Thus, to avoid the expense of purchasing butter and to increase profitability, the Happy Pancake House should extend this cost-saving change to its restaurants in the southeast and northeast as well."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author is trying say that most of the people cannot distinguish between butter and margarine. The author does point out that the store is trying to get profit out of the change from butter to margarine, however, he/she did not bring several assumptions that need to be addressed.
First of all it has been stated that only 2 percent of the customers complained that butter was not offered, and the remaining 98 percent were happy with it. We cannot assume that all of the people are happy. Perhaps some of them were not that observent in the changes that had occurred. Some of them might have known about the change and just decided to move on whether they liked it or not. Also they might have thought that margarine was just as similar to butter and didn't think of checking the nutritional values in it. Maybe more than 2 percent of the population revolted but the many may have dropped out thinking there was no use in complaining.
Futhermore it was stated by the author that the Happy Pancake House should make cost-saving changes to their stores and to its restaurants in the southeast and northeast. The people of southwest United States were not able to distinguish the difference, but if the other parts of the United States do catch the difference in their service, then there may not be a profit for their store and in turn may also get criticized.
It can be seen that what the author has assumed here are some good ideas, however we don’t have enough evidence and information to conclude that this is the best way for them to make their store more popular.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...re happy with it. We cannot assume that all of the people are happy. Perhaps some of them ...
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Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...o move on whether they liked it or not. Also they might have thought that margarine ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 472, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...arine was just as similar to butter and didnt think of checking the nutritional value...
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Line 3, column 587, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...cent of the population revolted but the many may have dropped out thinking there was no ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1303.0 2235.4752809 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 282.0 442.535393258 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62056737589 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3899788479 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 215.323595506 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531914893617 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 704.065955056 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1505189669 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.454545455 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6363636364 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199119639554 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688696566904 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788424949046 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0953986203329 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677901153656 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 100.480337079 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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