The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants.
"Butter has now been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. Only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers cannot distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine. Thus, to avoid the expense of purchasing butter and to increase profitability, the Happy Pancake House should extend this cost-saving change to its restaurants in the southeast and northeast as well."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author is trying say that most of the people cannot distinguish between butter and margarine. The author does point out that the store is trying to get profit out of the change from butter to margarine, however, he/she did not bring several assumptions that need to be addressed.
First of all it has been stated that only 2 percent of the customers complained that butter was not offered, and the remaining 98 percent were happy with it. We cannot assume that all of the people are happy. Perhaps some of them were not that observent in the changes that had occurred. Some of them might have known about the change and just decided to move on whether they liked it or not. Also they might have thought that margarine was just as similar to butter and didn't think of checking the nutritional values in it. Maybe more than 2 percent of the population revolted but the many may have dropped out thinking there was no use in complaining.
Futhermore it was stated by the author that the Happy Pancake House should make cost-saving changes to their stores and to its restaurants in the southeast and northeast. The people of southwest United States were not able to distinguish the difference, but if the other parts of the United States do catch the difference in their service, then there may not be a profit for their storeand in turn may also get criticised.
It can be seen that what the author has assumed here are some good ideas, however we don’t have enough evidence and information to conclude that this is the best way for them to make their store more popular.
- The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants Butter has now been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States Only about 2 percent of customers have complain 50
- The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants Butter has now been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States Only about 2 percent of customers have complain 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...re happy with it. We cannot assume that all of the people are happy. Perhaps some of them ...
Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
...o move on whether they liked it or not. Also they might have thought that margarine ...
Line 3, column 472, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
...arine was just as similar to butter and didnt think of checking the nutritional value...
Line 3, column 587, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...cent of the population revolted but the many may have dropped out thinking there was no ...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1303.0 2260.96107784 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 281.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63701067616 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40088276298 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537366548043 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 705.55239521 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9759990067 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.454545455 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5454545455 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200916415451 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688696566904 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788424949046 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0961608097218 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686141508695 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 284 350
No. of Characters: 1270 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.105 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.472 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.332 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 81 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 51 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.32 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.369 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.603 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.174 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5