The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants.
"Butter has now been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. Only about 2 percent of customers have filed a formal complaint, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers cannot distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine. Thus, to avoid the expense of purchasing butter, the Happy Pancake House should extend this cost-saving change to its restaurants throughout the rest of the country."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted
In this passage Happy pancake House has applied cost saving strategy in which butter in pan cake is replaced by its substitute margarine and they claim that the 98% of the customer are happy with the changes. However, this claim laid down by Happy pancake House is based on many unfolded assumption, and if not sub stained it will dramatically weaken the assertion made by cake house.
Firstly, argument claim that the out of 100 customer 98 customer is happy to have margarine in pancake in place of butter. It can be possible that the due to use to margarine as substitute there is potential decreases in the customer and the observation that is made on the group of data like taste of margarine and people stop to visit the store will effect the sales of Happy pancake house. So ,if the above claim is not supported by author with evidence it will the weaken this strategy to apply throughout the rest of the country.
Secondly, this strategy of using margarine is applied to only southwestern part of united states and it is assume it will resemble same effect in other part of the country. Perhaps, there can be possibilities that the other part of country like only butter in there pancake. So, therefore they given margarine in pancake will not buy and consequently reduce the sales of pancake house. Thus author must bolstered the claim made above otherwise it will significantly weaken the author cost saving strategy.
Lastly, author of the passage presume that all the customer dislike the margarine has complaint file. There can be possibilities that some of customer who dislike the margarine have complaint and major simply not file complaint. Furthermore, this will mislead the data to be evaluated for the strategy. Therefore above claim held true it will weaken the persuasiveness of the business manager to apply the strategy to other parts of the country.
In conclusion, memorandum written by business manager has many unwarranted assumption like the presuming the taste of people of the other parts of country ,not specifying the data group for the observation made in argument. If these assumption remain unfolded it will significantly hamper the business manager suggestion to apply strategy of using margarine as substitute of butter for cost saving.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 1863 1500
No. of Different Words: 146 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.89 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.639 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.541 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 45, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'customer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'customers'.
Suggestion: customers
...tly, argument claim that the out of 100 customer 98 customer is happy to have margarine ...
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Line 3, column 57, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'customer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'customers'.
Suggestion: customers
...t claim that the out of 100 customer 98 customer is happy to have margarine in pancake i...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are potential decreases'?
Suggestion: there are potential decreases
...e due to use to margarine as substitute there is potential decreases in the customer and the observation tha...
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Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...and people stop to visit the store will effect the sales of Happy pancake house. So ,i...
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Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ffect the sales of Happy pancake house. So ,if the above claim is not supported by au...
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Line 3, column 396, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ect the sales of Happy pancake house. So ,if the above claim is not supported by ...
^^
Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of Happy pancake house. So ,if the above claim is not supported by author with e...
^^
Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e claim is not supported by author with evidence it will the weaken this strateg...
^^
Line 3, column 468, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ported by author with evidence it will the weaken this strategy to apply throughout the r...
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Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'assumed'.
Suggestion: assumed
...western part of united states and it is assume it will resemble same effect in other p...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'gave'?
Suggestion: gave
...er in there pancake. So, therefore they given margarine in pancake will not buy and c...
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Line 6, column 166, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es that some of customer who dislike the margarine have complaint and major simpl...
^^
Line 6, column 304, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... data to be evaluated for the strategy. Therefore above claim held true it will weaken th...
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Line 6, column 424, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s manager to apply the strategy to other parts of the country. In conclusi...
^^
Line 6, column 448, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...trategy to other parts of the country. In conclusion, memorandum written by bus...
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Line 8, column 155, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... of people of the other parts of country ,not specifying the data group for the ob...
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Line 8, column 228, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this assumption' or 'these assumptions'?
Suggestion: this assumption; these assumptions
...or the observation made in argument. If these assumption remain unfolded it will significantly h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 381.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00262467192 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6926601161 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.40157480315 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 619.2 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.143805968 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.066666667 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 5.70786347227 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254417331917 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094185950126 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722134711868 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15300808143 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580631975361 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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