An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Author argument suggested that to increase the vitamin A in inhabitant of Tagus ,the government should do everything that promote this recently discovered breed of millet high in vitamin A. However, this argument contain many unfolded assumption that must be substained otherwise it will weaken the author suggestion.
Firstly, it readily believe that deficiency of the vitamin A among people of Tagus can be increased only by newly discovered millet. It can be possible that other than millet some grain can increase the percentage of vitamin A in people making taking in them daily diet. Above claim is not bolstered with evidence by author. Therefore, it weaken the author suggestion.
Secondly, it is claim that farmer will provided subsidies for farming the new variety of millet because cost of the farming this new millet is high. It could be possible that subsidies given to farmer for farming millet will be not used for farming the millet but used in other grain in which farmer are more likely to gain profit. Thus, subsidies provided to farmer will not useful and result in overall less production of new variety of millet. Thus author must account that subsidies will properly used by farmer to produce millet.
Lastly, it presumed that people of Tagus will readily accept new founded breed of millet in their daily diet. Perhaps, new breed of millet provided sufficient vitamin A, but people find very hard to digestible. So, people will not eat food that is not digestible to stomach. Furthermore , it can possible that the taste of newly millet is not good.Ab
In conclusion ,argument hold many unwarranted assumption like only millet can increase decrease the deficiency , subsidies provided used by farmer for only farming millet and etc. Therefore, this assumption needed to be warranted otherwise it will seriously weaken author's suggestion for government of Tagus .
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 308 350
No. of Characters: 1546 1500
No. of Different Words: 130 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.189 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.019 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.523 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.059 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.395 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.637 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 26, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Author argument suggested that to increase the vitamin A in inhabi...
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Line 1, column 81, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ase the vitamin A in inhabitant of Tagus ,the government should do everything that...
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Line 3, column 21, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'believes'?
Suggestion: believes
...thor suggestion. Firstly, it readily believe that deficiency of the vitamin A among...
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Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...believe that deficiency of the vitamin A among people of Tagus can be increased o...
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Line 3, column 238, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se the percentage of vitamin A in people making taking in them daily diet. Above ...
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Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'weakens'?
Suggestion: weakens
... with evidence by author. Therefore, it weaken the author suggestion. Secondly, it ...
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Line 5, column 40, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
... Secondly, it is claim that farmer will provided subsidies for farming the new variety o...
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Line 5, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t could be possible that subsidies given to farmer for farming millet will be not...
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Line 5, column 503, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'use'
Suggestion: use
...st account that subsidies will properly used by farmer to produce millet. Lastly,...
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Line 7, column 287, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s not digestible to stomach. Furthermore , it can possible that the taste of newl...
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Line 7, column 305, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o stomach. Furthermore , it can possible that the taste of newly millet is not go...
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Line 7, column 350, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Ab
...t the taste of newly millet is not good.Ab In conclusion ,argument ho...
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Line 14, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s not good.Ab In conclusion ,argument hold many unwarranted assumptio...
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Line 14, column 57, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rgument hold many unwarranted assumption like only millet can increase decrease t...
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Line 14, column 112, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...let can increase decrease the deficiency , subsidies provided used by farmer for o...
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Line 14, column 173, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... used by farmer for only farming millet and etc. Therefore, this assumption needed to be...
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Line 14, column 309, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...thors suggestion for government of Tagus .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, lastly, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1599.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 307.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20846905537 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58986458009 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446254071661 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3231154441 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.6 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.401238289313 0.218282227539 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14860632628 0.0743258471296 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0880461246607 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2288802604 0.128457276422 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499099598699 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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