Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.
Although few people believe that music is the best way to keep together different cultures and generation gaps. I support this statement to a large extend for some reasons. My position is argued further with explanation.
Out of all reason the foremost one is music is an excellent to breakdown culture barriers. This is because people from different cultures can enjoy listening to music together and through this fun shared experience they can feel closer. For instance, we had a cultural music festival at my school and we had fun listening to music from each other's cultures, and by enjoying this, bonds were strengthened between students from different nationalities. Moreover, we can learn about other cultures by listening to their music and by understanding other cultures better we can feel a closer connection with them.
Additionally, i also believe that music can reduce the social distance between different generation. When different generations listen to the same types of music they can have a fun together and this can become bonding experience. Furthermore, when family spend quantity time together they are likely to continue to do family activities more in future and this leads to stronger bonds amongst the family.
However, i would not overlook the other side too. To begin with, different ages of people have varied in songs. A song which release in 18's and 19's are more about patriotism and true love. But nowadays there are too many songs release everyday so children are more likely to listen new songs rather than old one. Furthermore, some time it's hard to listen others cultures of songs because we need basic knowledge of this language may be different cultures of songs in different languages.
Thus, to conclude the discussion, it can be finally said that despite the fact of music can lead to social cohesion between different cultures and age groups. This is because people will bring closer when they have fun together and also because they can have a greater understanding of their differences through shared experiences. Therefore, i believe should be used more as a way to breakdown barriers amongst different types of people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1824.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12359550562 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70668187116 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51404494382 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 572.4 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0484580501 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.333333333 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7777777778 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282726258586 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097834852587 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731112228446 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177348333523 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465413821418 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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