The general welfare of a nation's people is a better indication of that nation's greatness than are the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disag

A nation's success entirely depends on how it's people behaves.People of a country are it's main weapons to give a strong representation towards world.Some are arrogant and some are well mannered.That's not a matter but most important thing is that how they contribute towards that nation.An man may be arrogant but if he contributes more towards the welfare of the country, it works more for the greatness of that nation. On the other hand , if a well mannered man doesn't contribute towards a nation's welfare world won't remember him for his well mannered behaviors. He has to come to the party to achieve something big on his name.

A country may produce clusters of good rulers ,artists or scientists. They may achieve tons and tons of successes.Yes, that's good but only towards his name, not his country's name.So their first focus should be on how can they contribute towards the general welfare of their nation's people.

For example, a ruler might have great achievements but if he/she doesn't contribute towards the rural people of the country, the man and women who starve for 2/3 days, people who don't have enough treatment facilities and who don't have the opportunity to buy a simple thing ,that achievement doesn't count. He has to stand for these poor people rather than focusing on his achievements. He should find problems that people are facing like poor road surface conditions,traffic jams,living opportunities etc.

Similarly,an artist or scientist who can easily come good to a nation's people by implementing his arts or scientific discoveries towards a nation's welfare.An artist may art a beautiful scenery but if he applies it to it's nation and make his country look more beautiful it will be better rather than his artistic achievement.A scientist can also apply his discoveries for the welfare of it's nations.

So I completely agreed withe the statement stated above.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, similarly, so, well, as to, for example, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 58.6224719101 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 312.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07692307692 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95384993006 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522435897436 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 132.898457478 60.3974514979 220% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 158.4 118.986275619 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2 23.4991977007 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1 5.21951772744 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 7.80617977528 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161517345427 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623774288425 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370940638188 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0968265667996 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594834939165 0.0667264976115 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.1392134831 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 100.480337079 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.7820224719 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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