Government should invest as much as in arts as in military.
Government play a vital role in the development of any nation. What, where and how to invest is very crucial decision which should to be taken after proper research. Military should be given more importance than arts. In military, the investment is needed and it even more essential to invest in military than in arts.
Military of a nation is very important for its citizen to be safe. More and people should join military and serve for the nation. There are so many people out there who are capable of being a good soldier but because of their family responsibilities, they do not join the military. If the government will invest more in military and comfort the soldiers and their family then more people will be assured and ready to join the military. For example, if the government will assure that the military officers and their family members will be given security and helped by the government the more people will join military.
Now, on the other side, arts is also important but when compared with military it should be given less importance. If the government want to invest in arts then there is no issue but at the same time, investment done in military should not fall short. Investing equally in arts and military, at some point of time will cause shortage either in arts or military. Shortage of investment in arts might be adjustable sometimes but when military is considered there should not be any sort of irresponsibility.
Therefore, what the author is trying to suggest might not be beneficial for a nation in future. Military is important and it should be be given the greatest importance and hence government should invest more in military. The idea of investing equally in arts and military should be planned in a very proper manner by considering all the possible aspects not not just few good aspects but also the bad aspects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ent the more people will join military. Now, on the other side, arts is also imp...
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...time, investment done in military should not fall short. Investing equally in art...
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...re. Military is important and it should be be given the greatest importance and hence...
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... good aspects but also the bad aspects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, then, therefore, for example, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 33.0505617978 27% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 321.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84735202492 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63950266361 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 215.323595506 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429906542056 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 505.8 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9250458155 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.25 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0625 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9375 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36061547725 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146678104217 0.0831039109588 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10148268875 0.0758088955206 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272037785985 0.150359130593 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.09601667571 0.0667264976115 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 100.480337079 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.7820224719 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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