A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The argument is based upon a recent study which indicates that the children living in Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States. There author says that there are more number of dental care in United States with an average of 1.25 time per year as compared to Himalayan mountain region in Nepal.
Firstly, the author is trying to say that despite of the shortage of dentist in Himalayan mountains, children living there have lower tooth decay whereas in United States, there are many dentist but still children in United States suffer from tooth decay problems. But this fact does not prove that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay. There are many factors that contribute in tooth decay problems such as lifestyle, diet, how we take care of our teeth by keeping them clean every time. Healthy habits are also very important in lowering the tooth decay problems. For example, in United States, children eat junk food, consume carbonated drinks at a very high level and after having such diet then don't bother to brush twice a day and opt healthy tooth habits then even after a point of time, the dentist is helpless in solving the tooth decay issues.
Secondly, if children do not brush properly or do not take proper care of their teeth then it is even difficult for a dentist to cure their problems. The author should have mentioned more convincing points to state that regular dental care is not helpful. It can be possible that children living in Himalayan mountains might have a better diet and lifestyle with healthy habits than the children living in United States.
However, the argument does not stand strong on the thoughts mentioned by the author. The author should come up with more reasons and facts to prove that regular dental is not helpful in preventing tooth decay problems. There In the end we can say that the argument needs detailed study of many more factors.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 342 350
No. of Characters: 1613 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.3 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.716 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.142 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.308 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.418 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.403 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 183, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun dentist seems to be countable; consider using: 'many dentists'.
Suggestion: many dentists
...cay whereas in United States, there are many dentist but still children in United States suf...
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Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'dentists'?
Suggestion: dentists
...hereas in United States, there are many dentist but still children in United States suf...
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Line 5, column 725, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...h level and after having such diet then dont bother to brush twice a day and opt hea...
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Line 13, column 225, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n preventing tooth decay problems. There In the end we can say that the argument ...
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Line 13, column 273, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "needs detailed" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'detailing' or 'to be detailed'.
Suggestion: detailing; to be detailed
... end we can say that the argument needs detailed study of many more factors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, whereas, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 341.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87096774194 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20532538791 2.78398813304 79% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469208211144 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4361984341 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.769230769 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2307692308 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439855173644 0.218282227539 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157297163246 0.0743258471296 212% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.196616660793 0.0701772020484 280% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287405182595 0.128457276422 224% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.208824185852 0.0628817314937 332% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 98.500998004 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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