A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal rec | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.

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Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

While the author offers an interesting proposal of dental care not being helpful in preventing tooth decay, the argument is rife with holes and inconsistencies. The co relations made may be probable but there can be several other explanations for the conclusion obtained by the author. There may be several other factors due to which the children living in the Himalayan region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than the children living in suburban areas of the United States despite receiving less professional dental care than them.

Firstly, the author reports that the children of the Himalayan region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than the children living in suburban areas of the United States based of a recent study. But the author does does not specify the validity, reliability or scope of the study. We do not know the number of children from Nepal or United States that were observed as a part of the study. We also do not know the durations for which they were observed, or the particular tooth conditions that they were tested for. It is highly possible that the study was not representative of the entire or majority population of the children in the Himalayan region of Nepal or the Suburban Areas of the united states. If only a handful of children were observed to deduce conclusions in this study it is highly possible that its inferences are wrong and actually the majority of children who receive dental care have lesser tooth decay than those who don't. In such a condition the conclusion drawn of regular dental care not being helpful in preventing tooth decay will be completely refuted.
The author simply states that the children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay, but does not mention anything about their lifestyle or eating habits. It is extremely probable that the children in Nepal do not eat huge quantities of sweet food items resulting in a much slower rate of tooth decay. If the children in the suburban areas of the United states do consume a lot of sweets then that is probably the reason why they experience higher levels of tooth decay than the children in Nepal despite receiving more professional dental care. Hence, we can not reach the conclusion of regular dental care not being helpful in preventing tooth decay without knowing about the eating habits of all the children involved in the study.
Also, the author in his argument says that the children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite receiving less professional dental care. But it is probable that the lower levels of tooth decay in the study were found due to a lot of cases of tooth decay being unreported in the Himalayan region of Nepal due to them receiving little to no professional dental care. In actuality the children in Nepal might be suffering from tooth decay in a much higher number than the children in United states. hence the notion that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay will not hold true in such a case.
The author also does not talk about the dental hygiene practices followed by the children in the Himalayan region of Nepal. These children might be using a lot of dental products that are more beneficial than the once used by the people in suburban areas in the United States such as organic toothpastes etc. Their ayurvedic toothpastes formulated using local herbs might help slow down the rate of tooth decay in children
Thus, after reviewing the several factors involved, i can not agree with the recommendation made by the author. There might be a lot of rival explanations as mentioned that contradicts the author's statement.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, so, then, thus, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 91.0 55.5748502994 164% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3129.0 2260.96107784 138% => OK
No of words: 645.0 441.139720559 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8511627907 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03952876749 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50701845185 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.337984496124 0.468620217663 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 988.2 705.55239521 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.9290223314 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.227272727 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3181818182 23.324526521 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77272727273 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.505758173094 0.218282227539 232% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.19271346206 0.0743258471296 259% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.184758583761 0.0701772020484 263% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.302822866191 0.128457276422 236% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153392824243 0.0628817314937 244% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments