The governments today should be responsible to all of people in their countries. In the coutries which still at war, they should focus on the battle to chase the peace for their people .In the peaceful times, one government should consider both of the problems present and in the future, due to the development of of world, one can not tell how the problems unsolved would influence the future, while the problems now maybe emergent to the country. A government, with solving immediate problems well, it should consider the future of the society as the problems would come at times with out saying hello.I will address my viewpoints in three points.
As a Chinese, I have to show you the burden of the youth in China, the parents of ours who are getting older and older , we have no brothers or sisters given the one policy among the time when we gave birth to the world. So in the future, the small family will have to take care of four older parents without others' help. This policy was initially an implement as it was the hard time of the country which could not breed so many people. Now the burden is on our young people's shoulders' while there are no sufficient policy to take care of us. With the kids in the future ,we have to take care of the olders and youngers. A nightmare among most of the youth. If the government could deliberately enact some policy could mitigate the pressure on us in the past, we may have a respite now, everything seems to be late as the China is stepping into a society with more olders than average. The flaws of the policy will have more adverse effects in China.
Also, we have to see more good policy. In foreign affair, the Chinese government has had issues with the Japan government with a little island in the sea between the two countries for decades. Each of the government acclaimed the island belong to their own country. At first, the Chinese government could not compete with the Japanese government as the power of China was still feeble decades ago, thanks to our leader, Deng Xiaoping, who alleged to both of the governments, we should put the issue away and exploit this island together. This politic suggestion is full of oriental wisdom which was welcomed by both sides. We should know that even if the Chinese government could not compete with the Japanese government, it would not be a pattern forever, due to the rapid development of China, now the Japanese could not acclaim this island belonging to them confidently when Chinese petro drills near this island have been supplying gas to mainlands for years. So if the problem could not be handled now, let's put it away to let the descendents to figure out comprehensive solution.
However, some problem should be sovled now or at least made measures to prevent them in the future. Like the economy preservation, it is not the work of today but it will determine a countries' future, as two thousands years ago, one empero of China in Qin Dynasty who built a huge palace at the expense of all the foersts among Huang River. Consequecely the people along the river has suffered the big flood of Huang river for two thousand years. Just because the abuse of the forests along the river which can preserve the earth. So this prrservation of out natual source is significant in the future which we have to do it well now.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, well, while, as to, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 92.0 58.6224719101 157% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2740.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 594.0 442.535393258 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61279461279 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93681225224 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42551696492 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 215.323595506 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468013468013 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 853.2 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.8438074582 60.3974514979 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.130434783 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8260869565 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26086956522 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198330928937 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538119153144 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533224499871 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130796716599 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0893748786707 0.0667264976115 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.8971910112 147% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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