It is indeed crucial for governments to emphasis on the immediate problems that a country is facing for obvious reasons. However, here I argue that it is equally important for the government to solve anticipated problems of the future or even to prevent problems from occuring, in order to have a stable and sustainable development. While solving current issues of the society, governments should not ignore the potential hazardous consequences that any actions might bring in the future.
Some future problems of a country are seeded long before it shows and can cause detrimental effects to the country . These problems needs immediate attention and action before it even starts to develop. China's population crisis is one of them. After the civil war of China, chairman Mao ecouraged people to have more babies in order to recover the population lost in the war. The results has been more than successful that China now is overpopulated. Over population could leads to lack of resources for everyone, extreme competition between jobs and unstable society. With limitaion of the agricultural land in a country, over population potentially leads to starvation of some people. Overpopulation also can deterioate exponentially as people are furtile from 20s to 40s but normal human life span can reach to 90s. Within one person's life span, if the existing population still wants to have kids for each family, the amount of people multiplies. However, the counsequence of overpopulaiton does not shown after decades. Once it shows, it is disasterous and had to control by the time. Same principle applys for continueing population grow to prevent aging society, which also leads to lack of workforce which can have extremely negative effects on economics of a nation as well as social welfare.
When solving immediate problems, governments must not take solutions that will bring negative consequences in the future. For example, the current Brazil president want to improve economics and help farmers to gain more land. He decreased the budget for environmental protection which leads to increased activities in illigal deforesting. The Amazon forest endured the biggest rate of deforesting and a collosal forest fire. While destroying the forest will indeed create more farmland and enable famers to have a larger short-term economic boost, the long-term consequence is increased rates of global warming. Global warming might be a more expansive issue to solve compare to the economic gain by deforesting. Global warming also is a consequence that the whole planet will have to face as it creates a unstable environment for human to live in. In the end, deforesting solved the current issue but brings us a more detrimental consequence that human can't afford.
Therefore, I insist that government should treat both immediate and futrue problems seriously and do not compromise on nations' future. Any solutions for the current issues should not be based on detrimental future consequences. In the end, a sustainable development brings the most of the benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: need
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Message: You should probably use 'have', 'haven'.
Suggestion: have; haven
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2574.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 488.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27459016393 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9307136528 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516393442623 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 823.5 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.674290762 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7692307692 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15384615385 5.21951772744 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162784890077 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433068064684 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053005871753 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117886695025 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594695220773 0.0667264976115 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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