governments should invest as much as in the arts as they do in the military

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governments should invest as much as in the arts as they do in the military

The topic governments should invest as much as in the arts as they do in the military is contentious. I have to agree with this statement because the art plays a huge role in the country's overall development which we will discuss above. Moreover, this will make one's nation more aesthetic than others. The arts usually includes music, dance, paintings and etc

As the government starts funding in arts, the artist will improvise more pieces, not because for their own but also they are getting paid for doing the job. So an artist will be more interested in creating something. For instance, many reputed music composers are paid for creating mellifluous music, and the government wants them to prepare it for special occasions like independence day, republic day and etc. So the composer is interested in both ways making it for his own and getting paid for composing.

The variety of arts which are famous are usually found in museums like an art museum or history museum. This is what makes the country special than others. The foreigners visiting might get amazed with the arts created in a country. So when they visit in their own country they may applause those arts and artists as well. Like, when a foreigner came into us they notice that the culture is different here, they may see some posters designs, boards and etc. These factors will highly affect the thinking of an individual.

Investment in the arts can profit the government also by organizing concerts and art shows. Moreover, it will boost the entertainment industry in the country. The concert's performers are paid for the government to do the gigs. In Spain there are regular gigs for salsa dance which are viewed by my user for entertain purpose. The Shows profit more if the artist is of a higher level.

So the ultimatum is that if the government too willing to pay for art as they do for the military, it will lead to overall growth and moreover government can earn through as I mentioned in some of the points.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, well, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 58.6224719101 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 347.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76945244957 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50436090346 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530259365994 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.2135605395 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1052631579 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2631578947 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73684210526 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318370464862 0.243740707755 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108504535078 0.0831039109588 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.185037622042 0.0758088955206 244% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191832714311 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0977277234139 0.0667264976115 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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