Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Government of a country is responsible for its growth. A country have different fields associated with it such as Arts, Military, Education, Sports etc. I strongly believe that Military of a country should always be given more importance than any another fields of the country. Nationwide its the military that helps in protecting the citizens and the cities from any attacks that might happen from the outside world. Going forward I will provide you will required statistics to support my point of view.
Firstly, seeing the current situation of the world every country is prone to terror attacks. Thus, the army of a country have major responsibilities on their shoulders. Our army is standing on borders of different part of the world to save our country and its citizens from the evil intentions of the terrorist out in the world. They are to protect the world from evil.
Recently, terrorist had attacked India. They had sent the truck full of explosive material out on the road to hit the truck of army in which militants were coming back to duty from home. Around 30 militants died in the attack. Government should have invested more on making the commute of army more strong, bullet proof, explosive proof and well planned. There cars should have different sensors to detect danger. These are required so that the militants life could have been saved.
Whereas, Arts is related to the leisure. Government is already investing a hand full on Movies, Malls, Parks etc, to create a more healthy and leisure environment for its citizens. If the life of individuals are not safe, investing more in the leisure activities is surely not going to make a country better place to live in.
In addition to it, our 'Jawans' are protecting our country from terror. Always in day and night, in winter and summer, just to make sure the public of that nation takes a sound sleep without worrying about any threats. We should invest more on military camps, providing better uniforms according to climate. We should invest more in our missiles, bombs, guns etc. So, military should be in better position to safe guard ourselves, our country and their citizens.
Hence to sum up, I strongly disagree that the government should invest equally in military and arts. Arts helps in defining the quality of life but Military is responsible for the sustainability of life. Its like the water and the air in which we live. We need to protect the quality of water and air in order to lead a happy life, likewise our Military should be strong enough to lead a peaceful life. People should understand the value of our Army and should stand in support of them. In fact, we should cut out on some parts of invest in every field to have larger investment in Military.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, likewise, so, thus, well, whereas, in addition, in fact, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 474.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8164556962 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50436159259 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489451476793 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9041597584 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.724137931 118.986275619 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3448275862 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68965517241 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210912703989 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583429752314 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606252190015 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108850087135 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603098520547 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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