Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
According to the author, Arctic deer who lives on the island of Canada are becoming distinct and the reason for their distinctness is due to increase in global warming on our planet earth. A subsequent increase in global warming has caused the sea ice to melt thus, making their habitat difficult. Although global warming has created serious effects all over the world, but the claims provided by the author in the above argument are vague and inadequate.
To start of, author has said that the Arctic deer have been and are living on the island of Canada. If we look at the average temperature of Canada its nearly equal to -8 or -7 degrees celsius. Global warming has surely increased the temperature but Canada is still in the state that the ice would have covered the sea.
Moreover, the report are coming from the local hunters which itself sets an irony. Arctic deer are not becoming less in population because of global warming, they need to be protected from local hunters. Hunting should be blamed of instead of climatic conditions. They are no records to show the adverse effects of climatic conditions. Hence, the statement of author needs more statistics rather than just saying.
Furthermore, to add author states that deer are becoming distinct because they are not able to follow their tradition of moving around. When we really show light on the topic, if deer are not able to migrate than the population of deer might have increased as the migration is what should have came with the risk of settling in different environment every now and then. You have never seen someone living for ages at a place leading to decrease in population of the type.
In other words, global warming although has lead to the increase in temperature but in fact have helped the arctic deer to grow and sustain the plants longer. Plants are the food they sustain on which helps them to live longer. It might have made some minimal effects on the lifestyle but surely not the only reason for the deer extinct.
Therefore, to sum up, I strongly disagree with the writer global warming being the only factor involved for the deer population distinct. Author didn’t collected enough information regarding the global warming facts to prove his points better. Also, he made a mistake by relying on the statistics of the local hunters. It’s like the shooter is trusted with the life.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 410 350
No. of Characters: 1921 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.5 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.685 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.324 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.524 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.932 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.566 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 295, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'come'.
Suggestion: come
...ed as the migration is what should have came with the risk of settling in different ...
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Line 7, column 351, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
...sk of settling in different environment every now and then. You have never seen someone living for...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, look, moreover, really, regarding, so, still, then, therefore, thus, in fact, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 409.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86063569682 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40847305637 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513447432763 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7630187951 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6666666667 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4761904762 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265551459755 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760027419943 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072010100058 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134401494361 0.128457276422 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054300008287 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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