Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
The resources of a country should be used wisely. The fields of military and arts are entirely different, both these fields are necessary for the wholesome development of a country. The national security of a country depends upon its military strength, and there are other very important factors like terrorism and disaster control, where the military plays a vital role. The recommendation mentions that the government should invest as much in arts as they do in the military. I do not fully agree with this statement as the country's budget depends upon a lot of different factors and without taking them into consideration, such a recommendation cannot be adopted.
When we take the majority of cases, a lot of countries are under debts and face economic troubles throughout the year. These developing or under-developed countries needs to use their resources in much more vital areas than arts. Food, safety for its citizens, national security and higher living standards are some of the more important areas that needs focus before investing their money and resources in arts. In such a situation, these countries ought to give more emphasis on its military resources to have their citizens protected and helped when needed. When there are issues that needs to be addressed before investing in arts in the scenario, this recommendation will not be worth the cost the governments invest.
If we take the case of a developed nation in which its military forces are strong enough and the national security is sound, this recommendation is very valid, as spending equal amounts in arts betters the opportunities for artists and improves their living standards. For the wholesome development of the society, good entertainment and equal opportunities for all professions are important. Hence, the recommendation improves the lives of the people who live in mostly developed countries if adopted.
Investments should be made based on the needs of a country. Its government needs to carefully address the problems faced and set their budgets accordingly. The recommendation will only be helpful in certain limited scenarios in countries whose military resources are top notch and the living standards of the people are on the higher side.
Rounding up the points that are necessary to address the recommendation, my position is to maintain a neutral stand on this recommendation and giving more emphasis on the issues faced by the country and then divide its investments. The super powers of the world can definitely take this recommendation into consideration as their military is strong enough to defend and tackle different issues and their people are living at a higher standards. But the developing countries needs to give more importance to their national security and focus on developing their military resources, more than arts. Hence more investments should be made for their military than for their art sectors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ecurity and higher living standards are some of the more important areas that needs focus b...
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... countries whose military resources are top notch and the living standards of the people ...
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Suggestion: Hence,
...eir military resources, more than arts. Hence more investments should be made for the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, hence, if, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2462.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 469.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24946695096 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97008879242 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.434968017058 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 777.6 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7986334958 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.1 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.45 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.85 5.21951772744 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176684822433 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824334842981 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.177789488327 0.0758088955206 235% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111039868889 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0919476941694 0.0667264976115 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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