Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.

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Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.

As the recommendation says about the investment in Arts and Military, I would agree with the word importance here instead of investment (assuming investment here refers to monetary portion).Because we can't compare high cost paid for defense purposes with the development costs in arts field.
Firstly development of arts is something which can provide public a new developed field where the interested people can happily enroll or get employed instead of getting into traditional fields of science and mathematics just because of good jobs opportunities. So basically arts development will increase the diversity and will provide the benefits we can get from the people expert in arts subjects for overall national development. It can help in the quality of diplomatic relations we have with other nations.
Secondly promoting arts will make people more aware of the origins and history of the nation they are living in. It will help making people remember the struggles their ancestors have put in to create a peaceful society they are living in.These things can trigger socialist movements or non-profit organizations working towards betterment of the society.
Whereas when it comes to military investment we can't just show our back. With the increasing terrorists organizations across the world, it won't wise to loose any thread when it comes to defense expenditure. We surely need at least that capability that we can defend ourselves in the worst scenarios.
In conclusion I do agree with investing equally in terms of importance in both Arts and military, as both resolve their own purpose and both of them are needed for overall development.

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Average: 5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Because
...estment here refers to monetary portion.Because we cant compare high cost paid for defe...
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...e refers to monetary portion.Because we cant compare high cost paid for defense purp...
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Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to make' or 'make'.
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...nation they are living in. It will help making people remember the struggles their anc...
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...king towards betterment of the society. Whereas when it comes to military investment we...
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
...when it comes to military investment we cant just show our back. With the increasing...
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Suggestion: lose
...tions across the world, it wont wise to loose any thread when it comes to defense exp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, second, secondly, so, whereas, at least, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.5258426966 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 2235.4752809 62% => OK
No of words: 264.0 442.535393258 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25757575758 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91181217419 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.92155898 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.8 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.21951772744 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179408135643 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647874159405 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632919501746 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101373957919 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608183652271 0.0667264976115 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 21.5 11.8971910112 181% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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