Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Military is one of the biggest asset of any country and most of the countries invest the biggest portion of their budget in military and defense. Since in today's world where every country is in competition with other military and defense are necessary for national security.Thus, i strongly disagree with statement that government should invest as much in arts as they do in military.
The United States Of America have the biggest and most powerful military in world and also the most expensive one. States annual defense budget is nearly 50% of their overall budget, so should USA cut down their defense budget and invest more in arts? no. yes, arts is certainly is one of the important aspects of a society but national security should be priority.
Some proponents of this statement will argue that arts is as important as military and it will help to bring peace and not war as the military. military is not only for war military also for other disasters like terrorist attacks and even when some natural disaster strikes like tsunami or earthquake it is military which there for helping civilians. for example United State's army not only defends their border but also fight and help other countries to fight with terrorism all around the world and it also provides security to some other countries like Saudi Arabia.
In essence, yes i agree that arts is one of the important aspects of a society and the government should focus more and invest more in arts to help it to grow but a government should never invest as much in the arts as they do in military. Government should invest greatest portion of their budget in military and national security should be the priority of any government.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 293.0 442.535393258 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84641638225 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46854195882 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 215.323595506 58% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.423208191126 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 460.8 704.065955056 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.6164581186 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3 23.4991977007 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353467475153 0.243740707755 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159078344306 0.0831039109588 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.192455047773 0.0758088955206 254% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267253364652 0.150359130593 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.21844445265 0.0667264976115 327% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 100.480337079 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.