Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

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Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

No can deny that world is changing rapidally. Every day some new technology is introduced and replaces some existing technology. smart phones are one of the prime examples of technology shift and how new techonology is introduced every day. While some peole argue that parents should give their children smart phones as they believe that smart phones are importatnt tools for keeping in touch, i personally believe that parents should forbid young children from owning smart phones.

First of all the most important reasone, according to me, why parents should forbid their children from smart phones is that it acts as a distraction in children life and they do not concentrate on their studies and social life. Young age is the age when children learn the most, in this age children should go out of thier house and intract and play with other childrens and do other social activity as it important for their overall devlopment rather than spend entire day sitting in home and using their smart phones.

Smart phones are addictive and offers many applications, games and other stuff which can be addictive and children spent most of their time on smart phones which can even lead to many health related problem like obesity and dippresion. For example most of the sduies which are carried out ragarding the effects of smart phones on children asserts that obesity and some other nerological health issues which are found in large population of children is due to eccess use of smart phones.

One of the other bad consiquences that are caused by smart phones and is not in notice of a large population is the increasing rate of cyber crime against childronen. children are most vulnarable target for the cyber criminals as children are innocent and naive. every other we hear a news of some new cyber crime against children.

conncluding my essay i would say that yes it important to gve children a cell phone to keep them in touch but we should make sure that we give those cell phones to our children which does not have internet connection. A smart phone can do more harm than good to our children. Therefore, parents should forbif their young children from owning a smart phone.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, therefore, while, for example, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90106951872 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43473533922 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475935828877 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.9685212005 48.9658058833 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.928571429 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7142857143 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439862536225 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160026257843 0.076458572812 209% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109323718823 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253251955088 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775280771383 0.0645574589148 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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