A nation should require all of its students to study the same national cuniculum until they enter college.
A school curriculam is thought to be a highway to a student's successful career and ultimately to a successful life. While nobel and lofty, this view has littel bearing on reality. School curriculam has become black holes which suck students and froce them to study a pre defined courses weather students like it or not leading to wasting students valuable time on subject in which they are not at all intrested which can also lead increase in school dropouts. Therefore, a school curriculam should be based around the subjects the student wants to persue in college.
Suppose a student wants become engineer and hence want to join engineering college upon graduating the school and he does not have any intrest in subjects other than those related to engineering then making this student study litrature is waste of his time, as he is not at all intrested in litrature. This time could have been used to stuidy subjects related to engineeering. Forcing students to study subjects in which they are not intrested will also lead to disassotiation toward school and ultimately inrease in number of dropout students.
yes there will be some students who are undecided about what subject they want to persue in college, in this case the students should follow the univeresal curriculam to determine their field of intrest but generally a school curriculam should be based around indivisual student.
In essence, i strongly disagree with the statement that a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculam until they enter the college. Each student's school curriculam should be based around the subjects he or she is intrested and wants to persue in future but for some students who are undicide about what subject they want to persue in college a universal curriculam should be followed which indeed only help them to determine in which subjects they are intrested and what they want persue in college.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 51, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...urriculam is thought to be a highway to a students successful career and ultimately to a s...
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Line 5, column 25, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "wants become" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'become' or 'to be become'.
Suggestion: become; to be become
...n college. Suppose a student wants become engineer and hence want to join enginee...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Yes
...ase in number of dropout students. yes there will be some students who are und...
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Line 13, column 169, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
...urriculam until they enter the college. Each students school curriculam should be ba...
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Line 13, column 312, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... persue in future but for some students who are undicide about what subject they want t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, then, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 322.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04347826087 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61027015484 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 215.323595506 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459627329193 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.0 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.382246967 60.3974514979 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.4 118.986275619 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2 23.4991977007 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289034322188 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14328661359 0.0831039109588 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.193200832971 0.0758088955206 255% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194822262103 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116695265237 0.0667264976115 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 14.1392134831 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.8420337079 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 100.480337079 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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