Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Art is an integral part of our divine customs, traditions, and valuable learnings. To appreciate the art form that means we are being rooted in our origins. Nowadays, creativity can be valued inferior to other opportunities, and therefore in order for flourishing creative art form in this modern world, support from our government is a vital attribute. In my opinion, I agree with the recommendation made by the prompt that the government should provide art culture with fundings as they give capital to our mighty soldiers. In this way, art will acquire its valuable place again in modern culture.
First and foremost, in this technologically advanced world people have lost touch with their ancestral studies and cultural aspects of the art form. The essence of every person's creative side reflects through the art that he or she creates. The government should help the artist in such a way that people from different backgrounds would like to learn the particular art form. Due to the lack of exposure platforms of the art, most of the skilled art and the gist of an art form is getting lost. For instance, if the ruling politician organizes an exhibition of a variety of art and invites the new artist to perform and present their creativeness, then it is possible that society would look at the art form in a reputed manner.
Secondly, it is of utmost importance that the art form should be viewed as a "lucrative career" option. In order for maintaining the cultural background of the painting or any musical instrument, the artist needs to devote all his income. For example, as the artistic field is not considered a lucrative field, therefore, an artist has to sustain in a very harsh environment and the artist faces hardships such as he can not even generate sufficient money for his family. If the government officials support the performer with some amounts of money, then it will definitely help the artist in his day-to-day life. Further, this kind of motivation is necessary for an artist to push him towards enhancing his art form.
Opponents of my viewpoint would argue that for the safety of our nation it is a must that the officials provide capital for the army and its development, but most of the nations have well established military officers and soldiers who are talented in their work and has enough support from the nation itself. The presence of an army is going to there even hundreds of years later. For example, during world war I, a vast number of soldiers died while fighting with their respective enemies, but that decline in number can not be seen in the present army. Rather it encourages many young people to participate in patriotic acts in the coming years. Consequently, the number of young soldiers has risen, and thus, I believe that the artistic community requires fundings from the government and not the military.
To sum up, of course, some argue that military presence gives us a sense of safe life and we can lead our nation forward with the help of our skilled soldiers. However, the artists can also lead our nation's talented people towards a successful future by instilling culture and customs in them via the different art forms and after all the country can be safe if its economy is flourishing. Also, art can be introduced as a profitable profession once again with a substantial amount of fundings from the government.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, while, after all, as to, for example, for instance, kind of, of course, such as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2822.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 577.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89081455806 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90110439584 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76088791787 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483535528596 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 874.8 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1323996032 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.695652174 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0869565217 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.30434782609 5.21951772744 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129554698784 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0424635422819 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328974921596 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0788523182583 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305022526211 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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