If a person wants to be successful, he or she must be open minded to new ideas and willing to change his or her mind.
Success, the objective for everyone, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over what qualities can give rise to success. Avoiding being open-minded to new ideas and being willing to change his or her mind, in some people’s views, is preferable. Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that to succeed in life, it is beneficial for people to be open-minded, due to the contribution to efficiency and relationships.
What must be prioritized is that being open-minded, rather than being stubborn, helps a person enhance efficiency because of reducing time and error. First of all, it is obvious that an open-minded person spends less time doing things than others. To be more specific, when people have to learn subjects in the school, including mathematics, physics, and chemistry, an open-minded person can learn fast and outperform in the school because he or she is willing to learn any concepts derived from teachers; however, teachers may find it hard to impart knowledge to the students who insist in their own opinion and refuse to accept new knowledge. Furthermore, it is being open-minded that helps a person reduce error. In detail, an open-minded person is willing to follow others’ advice after knowing he or she makes mistakes, so he or she has more opportunities to be successful in the academic environment or in the workplace; by contrast, it is difficult to get such achievement for those who avoid accepting advice since they will commit mistakes over and over again.
What is equally worth discussing is that being willing to accept new ideas helps a person form intimate relationships with old friends and new friends. To begin with, relationships with old friends can be maintained when a person is willing to accept new ideas. To be more concise, when a person receives advice from old friends, he or she is willing to accept advice and change his or her mind, thus becoming a well-rounded person and succeeding in professional life; in contrast, stubborn people may find it difficult to change their minds and even anger their friends when they obtain advice from their old buddies, so they cannot receive advice from old friends and will thus have fewer chances to outperform in professional life. Moreover, it is an open-minded person that can develop close relationships with new friends. To explain it deeper, people from all works of life enjoy making friends with a person who is willing to accept new ideas, so an open-minded person can seek help from these friends in personal life; stereotyped people, nonetheless, will have hard time making friends with diverse backgrounds, so their personal life will not be improved.
Efficiency, the most important skill in life, will be boosted when a person is open-minded. Relationships, the foundation for success, will be facilitated and maintained if a person is willing to accept new ideas. To sum up, only when a person is open-minded can he or she succeed in the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 399, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to fast'
Suggestion: to fast
...mistry, an open-minded person can learn fast and outperform in the school because he...
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Line 7, column 274, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'succeeds'.
Suggestion: succeeds
...n a person is open-minded can he or she succeed in the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, thus, well, in contrast, first of all, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2499.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05870445344 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90483855034 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433198380567 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 753.3 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 124.171614485 60.3974514979 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 156.1875 118.986275619 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.875 23.4991977007 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 5.21951772744 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.515948367873 0.243740707755 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.219211832795 0.0831039109588 264% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112833961377 0.0758088955206 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.372507763237 0.150359130593 248% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343640207942 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.1392134831 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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