The increasingly rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves.
In today’s world, where speed is everything, people are looking for faster, easy and effective solutions day-to-day life problems. The fast paced life makes us envy the pastoral nostalgias of our ancestors who lived in summations, practiced rituals which are absent in today’s world – people are occupied with fast paced jobs and have no time for minute details which are the very essence of our identity, culture and beliefs in which we were raised as individuals. The prompt directs that the today’s rapid pace life is causing more problems for us, I agree with the prompt because of two reasons.
High paced lifestyle is leading to deteriorating health. The modern day lifestyle is encouraging us to move fast, do work faster and this does not provide us time to be involved in the concept of “balanced diet” individuals are more focused on daily work that they are moved by packed foods and fast foods which can be easily consumed. Thus, majority of us are directed by an unhealthy lifestyle which gets the job done but is conspicuously not complacent to champion a sound health. The same can be proved with the obesity cases which are at rise now – the main culprit being the lifestyle – moreover, the current life doesn’t arrest a satisfactory resting period, as deadlines are always near and people always have work to do – the cycle repeats and repeats till a person cannot do it anymore. The above instances prove that there are severe health problems due to this “Fast Paced” life styles.
Our current society is becoming empathetically illiberal. Everyone is focused on achieving one thing or the other; the goals are intrinsically driven – providing a better lifestyle for a family, wanting to buy a television, a promotion – which makes us forget the very basic qualities which we need to embrace others. We are indifferent to others suffering, falling into rubble banality and are focusing to meet our ends, the only thing which we are able to achieve is our goals. In today’s world we are aware of steps to be taken to raise the ladder, but we are unaware of our next neighbor. The fact is indeed true as we are progressing throughout our life; it is often the case now that people are unwary of their own neighbors. The above example demonstrates that we are being cut from our own emotions which in way increase our frailties.
Although, one can argue that we need to advance society and to do so we need intrinsic motivation, which is often a bolster to produce tangible results. However, the intrinsic motivation did exist in the past, the people were still wary about other. The only question this raises is where are we heading now? Are we becoming cultural savages by slighting them? In a way evidence contends on it.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 41.0 19.5258426966 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2329.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 477.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88259958071 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73125633607 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534591194969 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 14.0 4.99550561798 280% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.3458114744 60.3974514979 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.578947368 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1052631579 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.57894736842 5.21951772744 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140844844311 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468989566864 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792203828468 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874338349163 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0914908958007 0.0667264976115 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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