issue topicClaim: In order to help small businesses thrive, government should play a minimal role in private business matters.

Companies which tend to increase its profits and achieve larger market shares may go against government policies. I agree companies trying to profligate profits will be contentious with government interests.

Firstly,Corporates will tend to break the rules and by-pass the law,thus reducing money to be paid to the government, say in form of tax. In 2015 Volkswagon offended for selling cars with emission much greater than norms set by the government, to increase companies market share.

Moreover,companies trying to make money,put more pressure on its employees ,by increasing working hours or by increasing work load. This creates a situation where people suffer from physical and mental stresses and become insalubrious.

In addition to these,companies try to achieve larger market share,puts small business into unhealthy business environment, thus creating a monopoly in the market. This situation is not much encouraged by the government, as government always look for diversified environments.

Corporates having vociferous desire to get larger will tend go in a path destroying companies staff health and also bypassing the rules and laws set by government.

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No. of Words: 182 350

More content wanted.
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
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No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 182 350
No. of Characters: 968 1500
No. of Different Words: 114 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.673 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.319 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.812 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 77 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 59 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.871 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.42 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.751 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.049 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

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paragraph 1: introduction -- explain in your own words about the issue and give a thesis statement at the end. Give a reasonable not a dogmatic statement.

paragraph 2: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side A. First, ... Second, ...

paragraph 3: However, still I support side B. reason 1 + why reason 1 + example + a small conclusion for this paragraph.

paragraph 4: reason 2 + why reason 2 + example + a small conclusion for this paragraph.

paragraph 5: conclusion -- reinforce the thesis.
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