It is more harmful to compromise one’s own beliefs than to adhere to them.
Many people tend to waver between being flexible or being persistent and stubborn when dealing with any circumstances. The decision may differ by individuals, and there are no absolute answer to this statement. In regard to this matter, the given prompt contends that compromising one’s own beliefs is more harmful than adhering to them. I mostly agree with this position for two reasons, but I do concede that stubbornly sticking to one’s opinion may backfire.
First of all, adhering to one’s belief and goal is important because most accomplishments that a person achieves with his or her personal belief during the lifetime requires considerable amount of effort and perseverance. For instance, suppose that an undergraduate student aims to score the perfect score in the GRE. Even though it might be easy to raise the score from 150 to 160, it is much more difficult to improve the score from 160s to 170, a score that can be achieved with at most two wrong questions. Furthermore, if a high school student wants to become admitted to one of the Ivy League schools, he or she has to focus on maintaining a nearly perfect high school GPA, attaining a high SAT score, participating in extracurricular activities, and writing very impressive personal statements, and so on. This student should put a lot of time and effort persistently throughout four consecutive years in order to gain a high chance to get admitted to one of those top universities. These examples show that accomplishing something in one’s life requires significant amount of time and effort besides one’s doggedness and enthusiasm. Hence, it is crucial to adhere to one’s belief and goal and to persistently put efforts.
Secondly, besides playing a key role in accomplishing one’s goal, sticking to one’s belief is crucial on one’s life because it increases the chance of a living successful life. For instance, suppose that a person keeps changing his or her belief because of others’ beliefs. Specifically, if he or she gives up studying hard at college because one of his or her friend told him or her that people should enjoy lives and do whatever they want in the present because people only live once, this student is likely to live a miserable life at the end because his or her decisions are swayed by other people’s opinions rather than staying steadfast and clinging to one’s personal belief. If the student adhered to his or her belief that hardworking will pay off, he or she would not live a passive life that are susceptible others’ instigations agitations. These examples present that adhering to one’s belief increases the likelihood of one’s success in life or, to be more specific, the possibility that one will live an active and self-defining life. Therefore, one should have a firm personal belief in order to avoid being swayed by others.
Admittedly, sticking to one’s belief may lead to some negative consequences. For instance, Adolf Hitler, who firmly believed that the German ethnicity is the supreme one in the world, triggered World War II and massacred approximately six million Jewish people based on his belief that the Jewish are inferior. Even though it is true that he was able to occupy a high position in the government of Nazi Germany, his very belief and action produced the history’s most tragic event: the Jewish Holocaust. If Adolf Hitler were open to others’ stances and were willing to compromise some of his beliefs, this tragedy would had been obviated. This example shows that firmly adhering to one’s belief may have some repercussions in history.
In conclusion, in most cases, it is more detrimental to forego one’s own beliefs than to stick to them for two reasons outlined above. However, I do admit that, in some cases, sticking to a wrong or dangerous belief may lead to an undesirable result.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'answers'?
Suggestion: answers
... individuals, and there are no absolute answer to this statement. In regard to this ma...
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Line 4, column 620, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...some of his beliefs, this tragedy would had been obviated. This example shows that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in most cases, in regard to, in some cases, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 58.6224719101 150% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3225.0 2235.4752809 144% => OK
No of words: 642.0 442.535393258 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02336448598 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03365860172 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85227161456 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 308.0 215.323595506 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479750778816 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 1010.7 704.065955056 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.5923712898 60.3974514979 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.375 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.75 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41666666667 5.21951772744 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352197168309 0.243740707755 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114252893829 0.0831039109588 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138001351657 0.0758088955206 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209400421136 0.150359130593 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564577089896 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 100.480337079 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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