It is more harmful to compromise one's own beliefs than to adhere to them.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In d

To sustain in present day dynamic world , one's own beliefs has to be transformed in order to assert the balance with the society which we live in. As time passes , things that drive the world changes and one must be in sync to get the better of the times. Adhering to a fixed set of beliefs might make you less competent because what had worked in our parents period might not work now. A common example from my experience demonstrates this flaw , during my childhood there was a preconceived notion that children who play more do not study well , to our bad , this is believed by most of the children , the effect of this belief is that children who gets less score in the examination consquently repent for playing and become reluctant to play further on .If doing so improves his score he then attributes this to the belief rather than his intellect or a variety of other factors. As they grow old, they should become aware of the discrepancy in these beliefs that is entangled with the world and eradicate such misconceptions, thanks to research studies for imparting such knowledge in shaping the beliefs.For example, recent studies suggest that playing sports ,a form of exercise , improves concentration of the individual.

Sometimes this is the case where beliefs are followed bluntly without reason For instance,it was believed that a person who tries to succeed in multiple fields , fails to achieve none . But this is proved many times throghout the history, may eminent scientists such as newton who is expert in both physics and mathematics, tells us that with hard work and concentration we can culminate ourselves in any field.Such beliefs which are deeply rooted in our
minds are not eradicated by understanding the reason behind such beliefs.

However, there is problem inherent with chaging the beliefs , this perturbs a person mentally by decreasing his confidence and putting in an dilemma - a belief is right or wrong - therefore makes him dependent on anothers beliefs. Such a person inspite of striving to achieve, succumbs to those beliefs.

Therefore, one faces more difficulites in present day world if he is not abreast with the comptemparory factors that drives his well-being. But the important thing is to conform to the reason behind every belief and substantiating
them frequently to make better out of them.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 390.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01538461538 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78338089874 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584615384615 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 124.101464753 60.3974514979 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 177.818181818 118.986275619 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.4545454545 23.4991977007 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 5.21951772744 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 7.80617977528 256% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166308482912 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615548404517 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341019541428 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0746182398267 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340011571407 0.0667264976115 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 14.1392134831 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 48.8420337079 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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