Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

History has been portraying great leaders as humans with great persuasion qualities. Steve Jobs, Martin Luther King Jr and many more. But what history has shown us is a superficial ability. It conceals the hard work and determination of such people and conspires in etching a wrong belief in the minds of everyone. In my view relating well to other people is useful if and only if one has the required qualification to exhibit, or else it is just a car with a diamond windshield and no steering. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will elaborate on in the following paragraphs.

First of all, relating well to people is just a perquisite but does not guarantee you anything more than that. In order to progress forward in your career, hard work is way more important than the public relations. Students crack entrance exams using their intelligence that is gained from hard work. Public rhetoric has no hand in getting through the entrance. Likewise, everyone has to pass the interview to get hired. Although, some interviews may constitute an HR round and one should have to manage oneself in getting through this round by exhibiting proper relational abilities, but most of the time it is the last and the least important round. Research also shows that hiring managers decide, to hire the interviewee, in the previous rounds itself. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. During the end semester of my final year of graduation, I got placed into a big multi-million dollar company. Along with me, there were three other people who got the job, too. Among us four people, I am better with people and I was successful in developing a strong network inside the company. Consequently, I was the first to get promoted to all the four. So, in order to get into either a college or an office, hard work and intelligence are required. Once you get in, it depends on public relations as well.

Secondly, the other domain where public persuasion is most useful in politics. Many politicians, we see, grab the attention of common people by emanating exquisite charm. Moreover, some only depend on rhetoric forgetting about a proper manifesto. Obviously, tapping into people's minds is important, nonetheless, without proper administration, it would be no use. History has provided us with many examples. Considering the recent, 2016 elections of the United States, though Hilary was good at persuading a lot of people, people had no conviction in her administration. The result was electing Donald Trump as president of the United States. Good rhetoric, charismatic talk could help people to get engaged in any conversation, however, the content of the topic at discussion is the foremost thing.

In conclusion, at times public relations can create an illusion rendering it is most imperative of all. But, in reality, our qualification is the most necessary aspect, making rhetoric an additional advantage, which can help in creating wonders, attaining ascendancy and helps in culminating any prospect of your career. Students should work hard in honing the skills required but should also keep an eye to this aspect to reach great heights in career.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, likewise, may, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, well, as to, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2647.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 529.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00378071834 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86023773526 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568998109641 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 819.0 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.2070623592 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3870967742 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.064516129 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.32258064516 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192914627349 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044054302569 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046140606879 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109590308156 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614461865056 0.0645574589148 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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