It is said that great leaders are made up of equally great ideas. It is these great ideas that laid the foundational of our modern beliefs such as democracy, equality. Had our founding fathers wavered in the battles that are fought in the mind between different ideologies, they wouldn't have won those that they fought on land with bone and blood. I therefore believe that one should ponder, create and debate one's beliefs and once they have forged them out of the furnace of expereince and the hard anvil of time, one should fight with it, their battle and once they break they shouldn't be bogged down by it. They should go forge a new one, a stronger one.
Every santient being is bound have beliefs. These beliefs are the conjugation of the lessons they learnt through from childhood through out their adulthood. These lessons are the valuable part of their character and this what defines them as a person. They can be the heritage of wisdom and morals that were passed onto them by their parents who they loved and respected. Who themselves have tested those ideas in tough times in their lives. Denouncing these ideas can morally uproot an individual. Take for example, gambling is a frowned upon in my family. It is so because my parents have seen families destroyed and children abondoned because of it. Would it then be reflective of my stength of character to compromise this belief and fall into this trap out peer pressure.
By acting based the on the principles that you believe in, you are more likely to imbibe confidence in others. A noble idea can change the course of humanity. But it would be impossible to make others rally behind you if you yourself are unsure about the effectiveness of your own idea. For example:The shift to electric vehicle from deisel driven vehicle. Had Elon Musk not shown enough trust in his belief by pushing Tesla motors out of bankarrupcy in 2008, we wouldn't be having Tesla Roadster moving on and around this planet in a low earth orbit.
I would like to temper my arguments above with a very important caveat. Before and even after developing your beliefs your should be very open to debate them. You shouldn't shun down the valid points that may be incongruous to your beliefs. It is intuative to think that by doing so you would come out defeated. But remember that Hind Swaraj was written by Gandhi only when he was ridiculed for his ways of freedom and it was Stalin that killed any one who dared speak against him. History hasen't been very kind on the latter. For adhereing strongly to your beliefs you must have beliefs that are actually strong. And only debates are the ways through which one can strenghten one's beliefs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, may, so, then, therefore, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 33.0505617978 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 472.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69491525424 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32544905358 2.79657885939 83% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552966101695 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6881046264 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0740740741 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4814814815 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.40740740741 5.21951772744 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209597401202 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053782351072 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614321621879 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129331286013 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0732754103728 0.0667264976115 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.