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"Aim for the stars and you shall land on moon" is a maxim that has inspired mankind to do the unthinkable, impossible, ingenious and perhaps quite literally land on moon. Gandhi thought of freeing the nation of quarter billion slaves without shedding a single drop of blood his enemy. Elon Musk thought of freeing the world from the thick smoky clouds from the cars. ISRO set a goal to orbit the Mars. However, it is not setting these goals that made them earn the respect of billions of people. It is through achieving those goals made them how the world remembers them. I therefore believe that one should not only set but achieve the ambitious goals they set for themselves.
Setting a goal is easy but it is achieving these goals that test one's character. It doesn't really take much efforts to open one's to do list and begin jotting down the beautiful mountains of Switzerland they would like to visit this summer, or an internship they would secure next semester to boost up their career. It is really easy to jot down these lofty goals and meander in the embellished imaginary think place one has created for themselves. It however takes enormous efforts and strength of character to work over time, to budget your expenditure and to save for the trip you planned or to study for an for elective on top of your hectic course work to secure that internship.
Moreover really ambitious goals may lead one to procrastinate. Setting a goal so high that one might not even know how to achieve them or worse, they are not even convinced that they can achieve them can led them to just ignore them and carry on with their life the way it is. It would have been better had they aimed for a goal that they were confident about. I would rather suggest that for any goal, it is important to to break that lofty goal into small achievable steps. A paper that is due next next should be researched by the weekend, rough drafted two days in advance and proofread by the night before submission.
I would like to however posit that by setting ambitious goal one is more likely to fail. Failures are the crisis where one find the wisdom to succeed and manage one success. It is not banal to say that indeed failures are the "stepping stone" to success. It took SpaceX a dozen rockets burnt to char to land a used rockets in one piece, it took thousands scratches of tape to found a layer of mono layer Graphene and it took six lives to take a giant leap of mankind on moon.
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...t ones character. It doesnt really take much efforts to open ones to do list and beg...
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...urse work to secure that internship. Moreover really ambitious goals may lead one to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 451.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54767184035 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38188047663 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521064301552 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7967390415 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.55 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.55 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209637821777 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642077757855 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457753907439 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124361709987 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282227256441 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.