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Government is a consortium of elected leaders by its populace. The government is for the people, by the people and from the people. We entrust the government to make decisions and pass laws which promote the society to its better form, than it now is. The prompt provides a dilemma of a sort, as it suggests that some people find it necessary for political leaders of the government to withhold the information from its people, and some do not. I believe that the government should hold the information from its populace because of two reasons.
Atomic Energy innovations should not be made public. Every country is focusing on developing atomic energies and weapons for power and defense purposes. These innovations are motivated by use of constrained resources and improving defense systems, but if exposed to wrong hands can be detrimental to nations as these can easily be misused. It is because of above information, the government and political leaders hide these facts. Moreover, the patents filed on atomic energy or instruments are published in a specialized journal, which is not made available to the public. This journal can however be accessed via few officials at higher level of hierarchy. This indeed is the correct approach, as it ensures these innovations are far from being misused. Thus, the political leaders and the government should hide this information.
It is important to hide information about the defense oriented maneuvers. The political leaders often make bold decisions to eliminate terrorist activities. Many secret service agents are involved in the missions – working for our well-being, are sometimes risking their lives by being physically involved in the terrorist groups as undercover agents. The political leaders of the government should under no circumstance reveal these critical and crucial information to the general populace, as it hinders with our security. For instance, the USA special service agent Robert James O'Neill was not revealed for long time. Similarly to make sure security of these agents and our country this information must be entrusted with political leaders and should not be made available to public.
Although one can argue that right to information act is introduced to keep people informed and prevent overpowering of the political leaders. However, perhaps the act should still have provision to hide sensitive information which if exposed will erode the security and well-being of the nation. Thus, the information should be hidden from the public if it is damaging to the nation as a whole. But, the information which is essential to the public according to the “right to information act” must be kept abreast to the public. Thus, as a whole it remains a dilemma as of what information is worth exposing and what is not?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Similarly,
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Suggestion: is
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, still, thus, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2369.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 454.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21806167401 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84883433884 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477973568282 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 756.9 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7151214118 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7083333333 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9166666667 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08333333333 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.243740707755 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0831039109588 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150359130593 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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