Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline; students cannot be motivated by school or college alone.
Whether learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline and students cannot be motivated by school or college alone can be weighed in many aspects. However, the statement is flawed because it excludes several important factors.
Admittedly, the speaker’s claim might appear to have some considerable merit. After all, personal discipline does play a core role of learning. In ancient times, when there was neither school nor college, people still pursued knowledge and improved themselves. Since at the time schools did not exist, in general cases, learning was powered by people’s own discipline or eagerness. However, in the argument, the author fails to take eagerness into account.
It is thus justifiable to take eagerness or even interest into account, and we will find the statement problematic. Consider some cases in which students pursue knowledge are solely based on their own eagerness or interest to the topic or subject, no doubt that they will be willing to spend extra time studying or penetrating these subjects. In contrast, when these students are studying those they are not interested in, it is possible that these seemingly “self-discipline” will dissipate. Thus, the benefit brought by eagerness and interest shouldn’t be ruled out.
Moreover, the speaker underestimates the school’s influence on learning. Under some circumstances in which students lack interest in the subjects or topics they participate in, school’s regulations such as exams could help maintain one’s personal discipline. Since records on campus might influence further advance in the academy such as enrollment of top universities or the salary of their first occupation, students may be willing to endure the subjects they dislike.
In summary, this claim is not as persuasive as it stands. Although personal discipline is an important factor in learning, we still cannot take it as the primary matter of it. Without motivation or eagerness, not every student is willing to maintain such discipline, and under those circumstances school’s regulations such as exams become another key factory to maintain one’s personal learning discipline. Therefore, since personal discipline may be the consequential product of other factors, it is not apropos to detach these factors from motivating one’s learning.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 248, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ess or interest to the topic or subject, no doubt that they will be willing to sp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, after all, in contrast, in general, in summary, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 355.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58591549296 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03693588466 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546478873239 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.1925975969 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.166666667 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7222222222 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.21951772744 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379434017348 0.243740707755 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107679236562 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166680579985 0.0758088955206 220% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239054619491 0.150359130593 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.187866608466 0.0667264976115 282% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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