The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals
The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals
What builds a person’s character? Bible suggests perseverance through hardship builds matured character. Even with an altruistic perspective, the argument seems to fit well the real life examples including Abraham Lincoln, Benjamin Franklin and even the average people around myself. Assuming that certain level of hardship and perseverance is required for one’s character to mature, frugality in the past might have played a role for developing strong individuals. It is too prompt, however, to conclude that contemporary life is an enemy of the strong and independent individuals because of its luxuries and conveniences. It is still possible to cultivate strong and independent personality in current luxurious life, because not only luxuries and hardships are all relative concepts, but also hardships vary in types Luxuries and convenience are rather relative than absolute concepts.
Many falls into temptation to debase ancient lifestyles as being completely lacking and wanting, considering the fact that most of them lacked food, transportation, housings and other materials that are abound today. Nevertheless, it is important to remember that our next generation might think the same for the current generation, since luxuries and convenience are subjective and relative perceptions. In fact, most generations considered themselves as improvement from the past, and believed that they enjoyed more luxuries and convenience that their ancestors had not even imagined. Thus, it is not appropriate to conclude that current generation is just too special to pursue admirable characters of the past as if we are not the equal human beings
Not only the concept of luxuries, but also the concept of hardship is relative and subjective. No one can determine the quantity of hardship needed to transform individual personality. For a young student, failure to enter a school he or she wanted can be a life-changing moment. Small difficulties experienced in daily life can be equivalent to the strong famine that our ancestors went through. On the contrary, for someone who has experienced hunger since birth, drought and famine might be trivial and not enough to help developing strong character. As a result, if our ancestors were able to achieve the admirable personalities in their own hardships, we can also do the same in our distinctive hardships.
Last but not the least, hardships can be experienced in many different ways even in economically abundant society. Our economic development did not prevent all the difficulties of the past, including illness, divorce, accidents. We all are not immune from those happening, or at least have to witness our close family or friend goes through them. It is not uncommon to find someone who started reflecting his or her life, and made adventurous attempts after the death of close family. Consequently, even with more luxuries and conveniences, we are not totally emptied of the opportunities to develop our personalities. In fact, we still keep the most important hardships of the past including illness and death.
As stated, we cannot make the contemporary society as an excuse, since the luxuries and hardships are all subjective concepts, thus we are not totally emptied of opportunities to develop strong individuals. In contemporary society where no need for fight for hunger or social system is found, it might be easier to waste time lavishing oneself on the endless pleasures of luxuries and conveniences, lacking the motivation to reflect on the meaning and purpose of life. While luxurious lifestyle is definitely not helpful for developing mature personality, it should be distinguished from the assumption that one cannot develop true inner-self at all in contemporary culture
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...truly strong and independent individuals What builds a person's character? B...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'abounded'.
Suggestion: abounded
..., housings and other materials that are abound today. Nevertheless, it is important to...
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Line 6, column 526, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to develop' or 'develop'.
Suggestion: to develop; develop
...might be trivial and not enough to help developing strong character. As a result, if our a...
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... least, hardships can be experienced in many different ways even in economically abundant soci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, well, while, at least, in fact, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 14.8657303371 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3297.0 2235.4752809 147% => OK
No of words: 602.0 442.535393258 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47674418605 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95335121839 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12065770983 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488372093023 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 1040.4 704.065955056 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0922836904 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.375 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0833333333 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352473125511 0.243740707755 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100218855794 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150990113677 0.0758088955206 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28583383626 0.150359130593 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.325510408053 0.0667264976115 488% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 157.0 100.480337079 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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