Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important.
The author stats that "Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important." I up-to a certain extent, disagree with the author on his stance on the change network communication systems have caused.
The reasons for my disagreement up-to a certain extent to the author's point of view is because it does not give proper insight and does not accounts for all cases. For example, the author stats those attention spans have gotten to be shorter. While it may in general case appear so but in reality it isn't so. Mass media and internet has provided the tools to increase the time and endurance of people's attention. Not only do we have internet with the help of which we can increase our attention spans but it also helps in providing constant focus on a particular topic. The other case due to which I agree to author's point of view is because due to mass media and internet today we have got things such as smart-phones and laptops which can simultaneously multiple things at a time. This has resulted into the decreasing the attention process of some people.
The other statement author gives is that the people today are able to do multiple tasks in the same amount of time. Although it may seem like the point I made above it isn't because it assumes a crucial step which is people today are able to manage the time which isn't necessarily true. The thing is people have made themselves able to do more work which is true but they haven't made themselves able to mange time. Now, some might think how I can be so sure about it. Well a data from Vellore University tells us that 73.8% of people suffer from work-life and home-life imbalance. That tells us people today still are not able to manage time. They just have managed successfully to be busier than they ever were.
Also the author stats that we have managed to make ourselves able to do work efficiently which is true and it the reason why we have become busier than ever. If we weren't efficient we wouldn't be busier and would only be able to do task at a slow rate. In my opine it should not be about has mass media and internet has helped us or not. It should be about have we have managed to successfully able to use them for our benefit as they were promised and made were for, in the first.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, well, while, for example, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 452.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53097345133 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.439076765 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45796460177 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 660.6 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6841957068 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.4 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42176841404 0.243740707755 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121050954751 0.0831039109588 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132511573277 0.0758088955206 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.30322919045 0.150359130593 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.246419579182 0.0667264976115 369% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 12.1639044944 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.