Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The passage suggest that Pirouettes Ballet school is the best dancing school for children as many pass out of these school has made big in the world. this statement may look like a logical conclusion to the reason above but in reality following questions needed to be answered first in order to understand whether this school is really a better school than other school in the way is publicized.
The first question that need to be answered that how many students are there in the Pirouettes Ballet school as it may give the overall idea how efficient the teachers in the PIROUETTES BALLET school are to teach dancing to their students. If suppose there are a lot of students more than any other schools in the country but if the results show only a slight increment over the number of students who made big, than it shows that the teachers are not that efficient and the schools is not great. On the other hand if the students who are successful to the students who take admission in PIROUETTES BALLET school have higher ration than the other schools, Than PIROUETTES BALLET schools is worth going.
Another question which needs to get answered is that how relevant the claim is. What is meant, how latest are the figures. It may be possible that the statement was made a long time ago and since then, the condition of the administration has declined. Are the teachers who teach there same as the teachers who were their when the claim was made. Moreover, if they are same do those teachers still have the same ability and are they still that efficient? Because if not so, than this reason defeats the whole claim by itself.
Another question which needs to be answered is that how much parents pay for Pirouettes Ballet school? It may be a world class school and may have higher fees than other schools but how much in does this school is able to give. if the rate of return is too less or if the rate of return is too low, that claim that Pirouettes Ballet school is the best school is not valid.
For example, suppose a student 'B' embroil into this world-class school from young age and fails it to make it big into the world than will it be okay or will it result her and her parents into a debt? If Yes, the answer to the claim that PIROUETTES BALLET school is the best is No. It would also helpful how many students are there like B whose parents can land into a big trouble just for crime to help out their daughter to follow her dreams. These are the question which needs to get answer before making any final statement.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 463 350
No. of Characters: 2036 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.639 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.397 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.195 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.007 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.59 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 13, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
The passage suggest that Pirouettes Ballet school is the be...
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Line 1, column 151, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...these school has made big in the world. this statement may look like a logical concl...
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Line 5, column 193, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt the teachers in the PIROUETTES BALLET school are to teach dancing to their stu...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...UETTES BALLET schools is worth going. Another question which needs to get answ...
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Line 9, column 474, Rule ID: COMMA_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
...till that efficient? Because if not so, than this reason defeats the whole claim by ...
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Line 13, column 57, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... which needs to be answered is that how much parents pay for Pirouettes Ballet schoo...
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Line 13, column 212, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'be'?
Suggestion: be
...chools but how much in does this school is able to give. if the rate of return is ...
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Line 13, column 229, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ch in does this school is able to give. if the rate of return is too less or if th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, moreover, really, so, still, then, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.6327345309 183% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 463.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51835853132 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23691376594 2.78398813304 80% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.406047516199 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.59920159681 81% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9663055133 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.058823529 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2352941176 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297282053554 0.218282227539 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106240377785 0.0743258471296 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0955781343059 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188890793682 0.128457276422 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0946988030598 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.45 48.3550499002 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.5979740519 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.65 8.32208582834 80% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 98.500998004 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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