Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The passage has the following logical fallacies. Firstly the passage assumes that Pirouttes Ballet School is better than other schools while not mentioning the various other factors that come into play while assessing a ballet school such as infrastructure , fees etc. Secondly the passage tells us that many of these students have gone about to become professional dancers in top dance companies thus failing to mention the exact number of students.
First fallacy is that the passage assumes Pirouettes Ballet School is better than other dance schools because it has the best teachers and great success rate for students who have passed out. It fails to mention other important factors like the infrastructure present in the school about how well it stands out from the rest of the dance schools and what is the fee of the school that makes it all the more worthy of being entitled as the best dance school in Elmtown.
Second fallacy is that the passage doesn't give an exact number on how many students actually became professional dancers with top companies and does not to give the statistics of the recent students who have passed out thereby giving a good picture of how the dance school is doing.
Therefore if the passage had contained information from the above factors, it would have had a stronger stance in ascertaining that Pirouettes Ballet School is the best dance school for any child to join in Elmtown.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: ,
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Suggestion: doesn't
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... of how the dance school is doing. Therefore if the passage had contained informatio...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...st dance school for any child to join in Elmtown.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, therefore, thus, well, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 58.6224719101 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1196.0 2235.4752809 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 240.0 442.535393258 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98333333333 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.55969084622 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4646674203 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 215.323595506 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504166666667 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 356.4 704.065955056 51% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.2370786517 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.3472352546 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.857142857 118.986275619 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.2857142857 23.4991977007 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1428571429 5.21951772744 233% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346508771053 0.243740707755 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165268840114 0.0831039109588 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0927737389981 0.0758088955206 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22516827114 0.150359130593 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764893718388 0.0667264976115 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 14.1392134831 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.8420337079 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 100.480337079 41% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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